Poems don't have to rhyme you know. Infact poems can have much more depth to them if they don't rhyme... Or maybe that's just me oppinion...

Ok I'm bored and In an Incredibly good mood so I shall take this time to critisise my work.
It's crap. There's no emotion. There's no imagination. IT DOESN'T EVEN RHYME!
It's boooring......

I could revamp it and make it a bit better..... but I wont.
Becasue I WANT TO SING!!!!!!!

Aaaw that's good. It really is. I liked it. It really opened my eyes and made me think. Well done.

you're mum has good taste obviously. u were 12 when u wrote this. geez. it's really good for a 12 year old very deep and good imagery + description of feelings. better than i can do now at 15! :)