loved the ending there, but you made a slip up with names on their date, ""Where do you wanna go?" Jack asked, as he took a hold of my hand." supposed to be mark. and just wondering, why didn't Jack tell her himself instead of telling Marlow? wouldn't she trust jack's words more than marlows?

hey, i'm liking the idea of the story, but i think you should clear up that the game is AFL.

::sigh:: So I was supposed to spend the day writing a speech and making a powerpoint presentation... but I decided to read a story at breakfast... and now it's 7 p.m. and I just finished it. Haha- you're story's so distracting. So good! Thank you! It would be fun to know what would have happened in those couple of chapters if Katelyn's test had been positive... what they would have said to each other... heh. I also think that Australian English is interesting- I thought that your 'football' meant our (American) 'soccer,' like in Europe, but it sounds like our footballs are the same. I also find it interesting that there's something against female sports players- is that normal there? Sorry, off topic. Well, thanks again for the riveting tale! I'll probably check out whatever else you've written now... though I really shouldn't...

Okay. second revieew for this story. Sry.

IT WAS AMAZING!

omg, i cant believe it.
I thought it was so cute how christian was happy like when she told him about the baby thingy and i liked how u handled all of tha.t

I thought it was amazing,

(I like the word amazing)

I spent the last two days reading this story.
Actually i stayed up till four am last night and i just finished it.

I jsut friggin loved it al =]

Okay. I probably shoud finish the story before i review.

But i reaaly wanted to say soemthing.

I'll review at the end of the story, though.

THAT WAS SO CLICHE!
His ex comes back and tries to steal him away from her.
Then the girl walks in on them.

That is completely clichee!
I onder what christian does to make it up to her?

Hm, i should probably finish this now.

Okay. bye.

greatgreat

so i was wondering what sport exactly are they playing... like the rules or something im totally confused.

BTW great job so far

lol, shes a "jock"

it sounds interesting

i don't get it. is this football as in american football or football as in soccer?

lol. this is funny.

hi

im reading your story: the experiment

its pretty good, but the first chapter seems a little...busy

i had to read it a fewtimes to figure out what you were trying to say

but the end of the first chapter was very good

I think this story kind of went on and on and got a bit repetitive at times..but apart from that it was good.
I loved it but i have no intention of reading the sequel it finished right where i wanted it to.

hey,
i have to say i love the story, your characters seem very real and i'm looking forward to future plot twists.
If only just to seem intelligent i feel like i should offer one bit of constructive criticism (you are welcome to ignore it) but i dont feel like your prologue does you main character justice. She seems very bitter (which she might well be, i mean i get that) but i don't think it really shows her sassiness and before we understand the cause for her bitterness, it could let down teh rest of your story. JUST in my humble opinion though!
Overall, i love it :)
Midge

I don't like stories with characters looking back on the past but seems interesting :)