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| Muffins 2008-08-04 ch 4, anon. | abuseso i was wondering what sport exactly are they playing... like the rules or something im totally confused. BTW great job so far |
| atreyu love 2008-05-17 ch 2,  | abuselol, shes a "jock" |
| atreyu love 2008-05-17 ch 1, | abuseit sounds interesting |
| clear vision 2007-12-27 ch 4, | abusei don't get it. is this football as in american football or football as in soccer? |
| screamo 2007-12-17 ch 2, | abuselol. this is funny. |
| Ria 2007-08-16 ch 1, anon. | abusehi im reading your story: the experiment its pretty good, but the first chapter seems a little...busy i had to read it a fewtimes to figure out what you were trying to say but the end of the first chapter was very good |
| britty-tt 2007-06-23 ch 67, | abuseI think this story kind of went on and on and got a bit repetitive at times..but apart from that it was good. I loved it but i have no intention of reading the sequel it finished right where i wanted it to. |
| Midge-The-Hopeless-Romantic 2007-05-28 ch 5, | abusehey, i have to say i love the story, your characters seem very real and i'm looking forward to future plot twists. If only just to seem intelligent i feel like i should offer one bit of constructive criticism (you are welcome to ignore it) but i dont feel like your prologue does you main character justice. She seems very bitter (which she might well be, i mean i get that) but i don't think it really shows her sassiness and before we understand the cause for her bitterness, it could let down teh rest of your story. JUST in my humble opinion though! Overall, i love it :) Midge |
| thruyourfaketan 2007-05-27 ch 1, | abuseI don't like stories with characters looking back on the past but seems interesting :) |
| Element Godess 2007-03-22 ch 6, | abuseIm only on chapter 6 but this is one of the best stories I've read in a long while. Its so very funny! So I cant wait to read more! |
| in darkness we glow 2006-09-21 ch 67, | abuseooh gosh this story was great! ii mean WOW.. i loved itt.. cant wait till the sequell =) take carez -x0x- |
| in darkness we glow 2006-09-19 ch 34, | abuseii love this chapter it was so funnyy and pennyz a **! god ii hate her.. she should one of those loner cheerleaders outcast from evryone cuz they hate herr! ahahahaah ii was laughfin my ** off with this onee ((chapt)) =) |
| BubblesKickAss 2006-09-17 ch 25, | abuseJust found this story and I love it! You are a wonderful writer! |
| Abenaunce 2006-05-27 ch 1, | abusei cant wait to read ;) |
| lilleo 2006-02-27 ch 67, | abusehey great story, one little confusion though. you are using english years and stuff, and say they play football but it seems like rugby... so are u american saying football or what? :S id appreciate a reply just so i kno thanks :) |