couldnt resist reading your other story as well, and i gotta say its equally as great!

i dont think your story runs in the traditional romantic/fantasy stories that fictionpress has so much of...its kind of refreshing to have a different story out there but that is equally captivating that your one is

this story flows differently (unique in a way) and i think personally unpredictable

i hope you continue the story!

hey hey, ive been reading this story since...4 years ago!?!? i was suprised and excited to see a few chapters added on since then! i think you changed the story slighted since 4 years back and it has gotten a lot better and interesting! (not saying it wasnt back then) maybe if i come back in a few years time there will be more chapters up? thanks for writing the story and i hope you continue!

i think you've got a good story line going on here .. however i find that you lose me in parts of the story line .. you seem to jump from one idea to the next .. you start a new thread without cutting off the first .. its like you're so excited to include and idea that you forget where you were going with the previous one .. does that make sense? .. hm .. idk ..

all in all i quite enjoyed it ..

O I love the way you write this. It's awesome.

i love the story so much...
i hope you continue soon
it seems like yola and quin are finally ...well in a sense bonding
UPDATE

umm, I feel like I kind of lost the plot in the last few chapters slightly, you tie it all up in the last one/s but for the chapter with the battle in it and the two following it, especially the two following it, there are assumptions of knowledge that the reader just doesn't have which is rather confusing.

I did enjoy reading it, especially the beginning, it didn't exactly move quickly but i liked the interplay between the characters and how you didn't retell events from different points of view. I've read very few fics which don't do that and I loved the effect it had, that you only had the perceptions of one character and had to rely on their opinions of the others' emotions and reactions which often tells just as much about the observing character as the observed

beautifully written. please continue

i love this story!!
it's written in a unique way and really makes the characters real...i cant wait for the rest of the story :D

that's so sweet. nice work

nice crisp beginning. great work

A little confusing, as I don't quite remember the previous plot line because of the time difference between the time I read this and the up-date of it. I must admit, I was rather shocked.

But I like how the prince and Yola are starting to form bonds. Yay!

Firstly, I must say I love your user name.

Secondly, I'm very saddened by the fact you're probably never going to up-date again.

This is a good story, and I both like and dislike how you've not had her instantly bond with the Prince, rather a common healer (and not in the strictly friend way, either). While I love the originality, I do long for a strong, loving bond between the Prince and her.

I also like how you've made the Elven world--not overly nice, but still very in tune with the earth.

The only real thing I can critique about this story is that you don't really describe things--people. I only have the vaguest sense of what she looks like. I'm not sure what hair color the Prince has. What does the clothing look like? How the food tastes, smells, and appears? Why on earth does she bathe so much (Generally, pre-modern times people didn't bathe much. Elves I could understand, but Yola?) How does she know how to fight? Cooking and pottery I can understand, but martial arts? She is a girl, right? Again with the, 'not of the time.' It's all fine and dandy if it is common for women to be independent and such, but you've not even commented once on it that I'm aware of.

this is story is great! please write soon. e-mail me if you update, its turkishjones35@yahoo.com

That was really good. I hope you will finish this story. Email me when you get your next chapter up! thanx! tootles!