heh, reminds me of Linkin Park
flow gets a bit uneven near the middle of the second verse
the message gets through in a direct manner, but I'd still suggest using a more metaphorical based approach
overall, it's a bit short but it's not bad

Holy crap, thats a good rap/song/thing. I agree with Funky Munky, get Eminem to sing it and put it to music, then we can be happy and die peacefully... ^.^"
Ok, good rap. Do more!

Yay Meg! Lol, like I didn't get it the first four lines, but when I read "like you did back then when we were friends" that was like wow. (for lack of better description) That was a cool line. (lines) Anyhoo, pretty cool rap/song thing w/e. (o:

awesome song
i managed to make up my own music to this song
Limp Bizkit's Eat You Alive actually went with this song quite well

Very good! I like it a lot and would rally like to hear it put to music.

You write music so well! ^^ Unlike me ...

Laterz! ^^

kool song/rap...maybe i'll just stick to poem. kool poem. ;) i like ;)

well, pz out

~shell25~

These sngs rock! I don't find many enjoyable songs to read so these were definetely worth reading. I applaude your talent. By the way, I'm sorry I havn't reviewed sooner. The site never E-mailed me the review so I didn't know I had it.

no, im not a fan of rap, tho i am a fan of ur style if u can tel...im having fun looking at ur songs and ignoring the world
-peace out and rock on, yumi
P.S: my AIM sn's: vertigo8MI, earthbound4287...i wont talk 2 u unless u talk 2 me(let me know it is u, random people bother me)