Your language is so beautiful.
I wish I could write as good as you can.
My writing ... never comes out the way I want.
Yours is tangible poetry. It lives, breathes, it breaks.
Hauntingly beautiful.
_asia

Again, simply wonderful. Not very many people can make dialogue in poems work, you pulled it off, due to how you formatted the verses. Love the line "like the bullies at school/who use words to hate."
*sighs* I've been so depressed lately. I've tried to write "happy" love poetry like this, but it just doesn't work. *bangs head against wall*
-PN

i wonder what goes though your head while writing this. you must have travelled way below where you can see who you are.

This is really lovely. A beautiful touching scene laid open, but a few things really struck me - 'as if I were made of gold', 'you know I fear silence more than lies', 'You smile. It fits your lips well...'. The structure of this poem is extremely effective, and the conversation you've selected and oven into it is very fitting. And it makes the poem seem very personal, as though we can all read it and admire, but only the writer knows the secret meaning, the reality, the seed that grew it.

Brilliant stuff.

Awesome! Put together very well! K/W

That was beautiful. I understand how you feel, To feel invisible, but have someone one person see you beneath all those crowds blocking your way. Even if it ends, never let the feeling go.