Nice.
I'm reminded of Devil May Cry and Blade, which is probably why I like this story. I'm a big fan of stuff like this and I'm in the process of writing something similar. I just hope I can do as well as this.
There are a few errors here and there, some of which can be caught by a simple read-through, but they're not huge and don't really detract from the quality of this story.
Keep up the good work,
DSL

This is AJ DEUSCH/PEN

Good job. I'm only thirteen and have been writing since i learned how.

This story was very nice. I like the action tied into drama. Sounds a little like a novel.

You're really good. From the first few sentences, it's obvious that you possess a great amount of skill. Anyway, this is great, you are a very talented author. Keep it up.

This story look hell sweet just like all your others. I do hope that you will post more chapters of it and soon. If you are planing to keep going with this story could you please tell me :). My email is

If you could email me and tell me that would be kool. Well thank you any way and until nex time CYA!

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