I really like this poem...the short lines make it more intense and give it a drum-like beat. Very nice.

i have to agree with everyone else that poem is neat. don't stop writing!

Wow. I don't know what to say - it's incredible, touching, stunning.

I hope you don't stop writing poetry you have a way to convey things of truth into unforgettable poems. On to read the rest.

ohhhhh this is so very good!

The last two lines are a very good way to end the poem. Love it!

I'm still chewing on it; the subject matter is perfectly understandable, but to to convey how or what is a bit beyond me *sheepish grin*. To say it's good is trite. It's sublime. DO NOT STOP WRITING ;)