a tad bit melodramatic, but very addictive! PLEASE UPDATE! I wanna know what happens. There is so much left unanswered.

Holy Heck, girl! If you don't finish this sucker I just might have to resort to suicide. It is painfully beautiful, and astoundingly written. Really, really pulls at the heartstrings especially after being in a similar situation when my father passed away. Avery's emotions are alarmingly realistic, and it is a true testament to how accomplished a writer you are.

Kudos!

Now finish it!

I still can't read this story without feeling this deep boned sadness. Reading this story (for probably the third time) still has the ability to make me feel as if I had lost someone close to me. Believe me when I say most stories don't do that at all.

I'm intensely curious about the little mysteries going on in the background- but more than anything else, I want to see exactly how Avery gets through life after loosing her brother.

I'm embarrassed to admit I've read this story since 2007, but never had the guts to review it. By the way, is this story officially discontinued?

I Like, I Lust, I Love!Please Update Soon!

Wow. I must say, I'm incredibly impressed with your story, its hardcore. I must also say, I'm incredibly - saddened? - that its not completed, or that you haven't attempted at it for such a long time! Is there any chance of you completing it? Or even remote thoughts of keeping it going?

Hey continue this? Be nice? I like it almost as much as hiring a hooligan...i kinda like the angst in it and Avery's no shit attitude. In this chapter she sounded a bit like Janie at some points..mostly a the beginning. Love Alice..Markus' touchy feely ways and gushiness are really icking me...ew..i coulnt help rolling my eyes every once and a while, when he was spewing out all that mushy stuff.

I like how in ur stories, besides the fact that they are well written and interesting, u get to learn something, or read a sentence which kinda stays with u and makes u see things in another light.

Do u use msn messenger btw..i'd love to chat if possible..?

Markus kinda creeped me out in that last bit...And oh! I bet Tom and Brent are secretly dating or in love or something! only two chapters left! *sigh*

:( I feel so sad after reading this chapter...You sure do have a way with words..

Okay, I'm half way across the chapter, but I'm already holding back the tears. Gosh ur such an amazing author. I'm an avid fan of Hiring a hooligan - it made me laugh my guts out - and it's great that ur back to writing it! As for this story, well i've read a couple of paragraphs and I'm already drawn into it...so we'll see where that goes...i dunno if it's finished but I'd guess it isnt. In that case, once ur done writing hiring a hooligan, I'll start bugging u to update this one

no i'm up to chapter 9. there's nothing after this.

lol, hk is exotic? that's rare...

I lo0o0ove this story! you havvee to finish it! ]

Ah, I just stumbled across this story again and added it to my favorites. I'm not sure if you even check your reviews anymore, but I just want you to know that I think this story is beautiful. Avery is drowning in her grief, and I can understand drowning in negative emotions. I went through some...bad stuff, when I was little, and it took me years and years to get over it. Sometimes, it just seems so much easier to just let the emotions take over, to quit trying to push them away and let them swallow you whole. To me, Avery is very realistic and her struggles are all too familiar. This prologue literally pulls at my heart, because I can clearly picture Avery at her little brother's grave, unable to forgive herself for something beyond her control, and desperate for her parents to just *look* at her with something more than a blank stare or accusations.

One of the most powerful scenes in the story, to me, is when you have Avery read Harry Potter to Alex's grave stone. The image it creates is heartbreaking. Anyway, this story makes me thankful that all of my half-siblings are healthy and happy, even if they are hyperactive little imps that are at least 19 years younger than me. So. Once again, I adore this story, and would love to see how it will end up. Perhaps that is wishful thinking, though.

Cheers,

Gillian

your writing is really really good, the quality and wording,

but... i dunno...

i'm getting pretty annoyed at your story. well, more like sobstory. it's like you processed every tragic stereotype you've ever read into recycled gunk and dumped it all onto the heroine.

though it's good enough to keep me reading. heh. well, it's not like it matters. i doubt you go on fictionpress anymore.

Dude, you suck! Please finish this stor. Pretty please...with cherries on top? :)