I love the description. It really grabs attention. some sentences confused me but, thats me.

WOW!! BRAVO!!!! YAYAYAYAY FOR THE COOLEST WRITER!! great work can't wait for more write write write!!!!!!! lol

Hey!! Good job!!!

*Tilts head* Wow, unlike most of the kosc drivel on FF.net, this story has a good amount of merit. A good introduction to a neat story. Don't have time for an intricate review, I'll do one next chapter.