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Moonwinges 2002-12-15 ch 1,	This is good, but I actually think you made it too quick and short without enough background. Of course, if it was for school, that would explain it - making it fit a criteria always hurts. You must really have blown their socks off when you brought it in though! Thank you for your review of "Winter's Sorrow". It is one of my more depressing poems, but that's how I feel during winter. I'm glad you like my work! I will try my best to press against my boundries - I'm going to try fantasy stories again, since I've been doing mostly poetry lately. Do you want me to notify you when I post it?
Spik3y 2002-11-12 ch 1,	Enjoyable read.! Started off really good, but I kinda got lost in the later chapters, mainly because they were much shorter and not as descriptive as the first couple. I loved the "Earth" bit, about the three not knowing what Earth was like, i.e. the shaking of hands and the landscape. Interesting characters! Try working this into a great story! Go for it!
Val Mora 2002-11-03 ch 1,	This would make a good novel, if you could only make it longer, and put in more elaboration. I mean, you didn't give me enough time to understand the characters or keep them straight - it took me thirty seconds to remember who the heck Faran was when Mai killed him. Plus, it was a little predictable, that Faran was the Assassin King. BTW, I'm curious about Bain. Ah, nevermind me. I'd be tempted to make him shaych - is he? And if not, why else would the Thing be referred to as male? ^_~ Ships are generally regarded as female because they're staffed by men who lack female company. griiiiiin Ignore me. I'm having a Daeraav phase. I'd like to know more about this world!
Carter Tachikawa 2002-10-27 ch 1,	Really nice story again. I usually don't lean towards sci-fi that much but I decided to read this and I'm glad I did. Nice story, maybe you could make it into a novel. KIU~CT

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