It's actually good, I see your haracters are in sequels, which brings the feeling of an Americanized version of the Avengers.

Hey, it's me again. Everything is good so far, but you spelled descend wrong. You don't have to change it. If I were you, I wouldn't bother but I'm telling you anyway. :)

omg! this rocks! totally cool!luv it! i luv CAleb *so hot* and Sheldon*so cute* v. saucy sex scene at the end lol...i cant wait too read your others:) which m gonna go do right now ...so cant talk..bibi

luv hellx

Just read the prolouge no doubt you're a Digital Fortress fan.

Very good story. This was wonderfully written and very exciting. I can't wait to read more of your stories

Very nice writing. Like I said, it's nice to see an action fic (not a fantasy wanting to be an action story). There are some minor problems, but if you want those, give me an e-mail and I'll discuss them with you privately. Other than that, keep up the good work!
-Steven Hildreth, Jr.

Wow.
Do you know how rare it is to find a decent action story around here? How about better than decent? Great? Your story has meets all three standards.
This one has minor flaws, mostly in puncuation, but also in how fast they fell for each other. I know that it can happen in real life, and it's been in other books (Clancy's WITHOUT REMORSE comes to mind-from acquaintances to lovers in less than six hours for two key characters), but it just seemed kind of rushed.
Other than that, I like the action! The arrest scene was great. I also like Agent Kwan, especially his Bond-esque crass quips.
I am definitely going to finish this one. Hell, maybe I'll rustle up a few bucks and buy a book off of you! ;-)
-Steven Hildreth, Jr.
Fort Huachuca, AZ
September 13, 2004

Excellent story! Best that I've read so far. Sheldon kicks butt like no other, and Caleb is just CIA eye candy. Perfect read. Please continue writing, and more excerpts involving Sheldon and Caleb are eagerly anticipated!

Splendid story and plot! I'd have hated you if you'd made Jonathan the bad guy! Lol. I'm glad it ended this way. But let me tell you this ... I just loved the story. It gripped me! I read it continuously like for four hours!
Now for constructive criticism ... I feel that the story would be more attractive if you didn't repeat too many words. For example ... you use too many 'sighs' I'm not saying that a person wouldn't sigh too many times ... I'm implying you could use different words ... equivalents perhaps? Like, 'took a deep breath' or along the line.
I felt Caleb wasn't that much action man in the story ... compared to Sheldon. I expected a big blow of action in the final ... like kicking or killing. I agree he was the one who unplugged those wires ... but still. Oh I'm just stupid I guess. Blonde. *heh*
I think that'd be all ... but let me tell you, you're story line is just cool! Hope you write on with a little bit of improvisation (which I myself need ... ) Thanks for being patient enough to read the review!
*FieryMoonGoddess*

I love it! Keep writing! Oh, and though this might sound like a flame, Zeus isn't the god of war. Mars is (Or that's his Roman name - I can't remember his Greek one!). But I really like how you connected Tantalus to your bad guy character, Regan Taylor! This is going to be a good one! Add more chapters!

I really enjoyed the story. I hope to read, more of your stories in the future.

This was a great story! I can't wait for the next episode.

I love the story. You have talent. I hope get published, you should try if you havent

A thing not to do while writing a story of any kind is: Do not ever, ever write too much dialogue. Read a book and youll realize that although dialogue is part of a story, it should not cover more than fifty percent of the story, otherwise the story is not a story but a script.

That's my tip. Still, good plot running.

YEAH! ^_^ ^O^!
I'm so happy! ^_^
That was a great story!
Yeah! Regan's dead! I kinda felt sorry for Lukas but he still was a bad guy T_T
Happy ending! Oh the joy the bliss the rapture! ^_^
*tear* I love happy endings
May Caleb and Sheldon live happily together for the rest of their lives!!
at least after they are done with your torture T_T
Till next time ~_~ BuhBye ^_~