nu!
leave it up please?
its wonderful even if its not how you would like it to be anymore.
i like both versions... but this is my especial favorite!

Oh noes! YOu MUST not delete it! Even if you DO rewrite it, nothing can compare to the charm of the original! *gives puppy dog eyes* PLEASE don't delete it! XP

On to the review! One of the most fantastic original stories I have ever had the pleasure of reading. ^.^ I can tell you really get into the charracters, but they do all seem the same... all the main ones at least. The creativity is astoundidng, and the length is even more so amazing. I could never figure out why people are scarred away by a nice, long story with a good plot, yaoi (though not too much of that yet), and sexeh men. ^_~ BTW, yo can be more explicit... I have read plenty more stories worse than this... *covers mouth hastily* I do believe I've said too much... Write on, my extremely talented friend. Write on.

Oh and by the way...since I changed my pen name...I'm DarkNatureChild. :)

OH MY GOD! It took me forever to find a chapter that I had not reviewed. I was beginning to give up. I hope you still remember me...I sure do! And I still adore this fic. I'm going to re-read it during the winter break so it could all just come back to me. I hope you're doing good too. *hugs*

Andy~

Feel the need to update anytime soon?

Oh, its soo cute^__^ I loved the gore scenes as well^__^ I love your work^__^ *huggles*

NO I love story ah well another chapter for me to print and read lol *huggles can't wait to read the new one

wa... ur changing the story? wa... i can understnad y tho... just dont 4get that as u go along the characters sortof develope their own personalities not at all like what u had planned... btw, sry, this is in the 1st chappie, but i have limited time on online...

**runs in circled screaming at the top of her lungs!** AH! **falls over laughing insanely** This was awesome! So awesome! Hey, if you have to re-do the WHOLE THING, then you have to re-do the WHOLE THING. But, I just want to ask you something, and I know other reviewers will back me up on this: Can you write a story just for Ushi+Iroha if you can please. That's only if you can. I'm not telling you or forcing you too, just suggesting. If you don't, I'm cool with it too.
I love this chapter. Especially some "very" specific parts. **pulls arm-rest out, pushes it back** Handy indeed. And I love the way Kura does business. It's wonderful. Maybe we can come to an agreement... **laughs** Anyway, TTYL! (Talk To You Later!)
JA-NE!
Sign: DNC

You know what you need to do? YOU NEED TO WRITE ANOTHER CHAPTER! Come on, my life is meaningless without MOOD MUSIC!!
I need more chapters! T_T Oh, please more chapters.
So now you know what you need to do. So please write more...
Sign: DNC

oh Kura is a show off... much like I would be if I was that powerful... but for now I can show off other stuff as well... *rants on about stuff* Wnywhos... Kura is getting really really cute me thinks! But this looks to be an interesting mission, will they ever catch the elusive shadow? Dun Dun Dun... the plot thickens... wanna read more... *feverishly scrolls down to chapter 16*

Kura in new clothes ^_^ Wo0t! and Shiro kicks@$$ little brats are irritating indeed, why must they be like that? Over protective and accusing parents... and they wonder why the childeren become so soft... But anywhos.. awesome story Okori! Then there's the secret assignment, whats going to happen? must... read... more...
On to Chapter 15!

WOW! That's all I have to say about that chapter... I added a few comments to the printout book... damn, that thing is huge... but me need to sleep now... BUT WOW! awesome writing.. will glomp you soon... maybe I'll start writing about Showa and Couvar. Okori, you always inspire me *^_^*, espically whith your amazing story. And I really do love Ushi in there... me love Ushi... *mo* I will read more.
@.@ it is a very hypnotic story.

Wow... Just, wow.
This is definitely one of the best things I've read in a while. I love the style of your writing, and the way you are developing your characters. And Ushi? Mrawr.
Iroha fascinates me, both light and dark sides of his personality. I really do want to know more about his darker aspect, though. Will we be seeing more of Ahori soon? The way you do his dream sequences is spanking good (I'm a sucker for dreams), though they can be a little confusing at times.
The twins are splendid together, though sometimes I feel that they're slipping a bit out of character. It tends to go back to (my perception of) normal after a couple of paragraphs, so it's not that big a deal. I like how you haven't just jumped straight into the smut, but are keeping the tension right up there.
My one plea - more Zack and Dane! Please? I have no idea why, but I really, really like Zack.
Hrm, what else...? If you want to throw a little more explanation about the city and how things work, that would be nice. That Salvation seems to be basically a later incarnation of New York took me by surprise, so a little more info on the setting wouldn't go astray.
I can't think of much else, so I'll just say that I really love this story so far and I'm looking forward to more.
Oh, and the chapter titles have given me some good music to listen to, so thanks a lot!

MAN! Don't kill me if I haven't reviewed and you've already written two new chapters and I've only read one. (I really dont like bellsouth now...they cut my internet). ANYWAY! I have aol now and I am happy.
This was awesome. (I still love Ushi+Ioha more the 'Kura+Shiro now). Thanks for the drawing again, I love it and shall keep it with me forever. You're the best. T_T I wi I knew you.
Anyway, gonna go finish up.
JA-NE! ^^'
Sign:
Andy-chan
PS: Beware of typos. o0