It wasn't great, but it wasn't bad. It's short and maybe a bit hurried. The language is lovely, as always. You could probably write a story about a turd floating in the sewer and make it sound great.

Again with the descriptions! ^.^ I loved this one as well. All the problems and how you had him start out simply trying to get away, like he hadn't planned on jumping at all.

I also liked the end, where he's standing in front of God. Now, I'm not Christian (I'm pagan) but that scene just really moved me. I loved the line, "*Silly child. * It said in a gently amused voice. *It doesn’t matter. I made you. There’s nothing you can do that would stop me loving you. *" It almost made me cry. -.-

Hey DCJ, it's me, DH! I finally got myself registered. *sniff sniff* Your work never fails to touch me. I've been there before and it's such a heavy, opressing feeling. Did I spell opressing right? Oh well. I like how you get your decriptions across without being overly descriptive.

This was awesome! I wish that everyone who contemplated suicide would read this. I also attempted suicide when i was 14, but a friend of mine caught me before i could finish. It's an intense feelings that make one want to succeed or even try.

Shibby. I especially liked the description at the start and how you portrayed God ^^ espeically the part about familiarity. Keep writing. I give you pepsi max! *dangles can in front of DCJ*

~Pseudo

good lord yer a good writer, ye know. Wow.