This is cool! Thanks for sharing this story with us.

I'll check out your other stuff when I get a chance, okay?

Vampire!! shweet!!! i know i'm talking weird. . but as im writing this, your sitting on my bed drawing so what the heck. Good luck with that picture!!

very NICE!

Interesting .... a few tips:

You should put each person's spoken words in a seperate paragraph. Don't use (again) in your story. Just write that 'she was dressed as a devil the third year in a row' or something like that.

You could use a bit more description in the 9th paragraph: say how spooky the woods are. Alex is scared of the dark, so say how she FEELS. How her heart is pounding in her chest, sweat breaking out, her palms damp, how she jumps at every little sound .. the trees may look like slelatol hands reaching for her ... stuff like that. You use things like that to build suspense.

I like the last line of your story: Through my grief and lack of attention to my surroundings, I would become what I was in costume not 6 hours before.

The camping bit was a good idea!

i'm guessing that you're an american. i think it kinda sounds like one of those Goosebumps stories. But it's okay. ^-^

Very good! I really like this. The first paragraph could have been two, and same with the large paragraph near the very end, but this was good. It could definitely be longer!

This could make a good series. How does Alex get home? How will she cope with the death of her twin? Please continue^_^