Wow, this is freakin' hilarious!! Yes, God always has a sense of humor doesn't he? :p Yeah, HIV it makes lots of sense! And YAY Gabriel is my fav angel ever!

This reminds me of Pratchett - something about the way you form the sentences and all.

In fact, it reminds me of Good Omens, with the difference that God was never in Good Omens.

Wonderful work, though.

x DD;; I love it! Absolutely hillarious -- I especially loved the 'random Tuesday just to blindside them' part.

LOL! Oh gods, this was great! "A random Tuesday" "Martin Luther King Jr.", those were funny. You should continue!

That was clever, very good way to explain HIV and Martin Luther King Jr. This is the second time I've reviewed your story in 1o minutes, I'm on a roll I tell you!

I liked this! I found it very funny and the HIV was an interesting and sinister twist. Tough love, huh? ^__^ Sayonara!!

HHahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahah! Guess if I like your story or if my laghter is mocking? WRONG! I like your story.

I found this interesting.

*lol* " Random Tuesday."

Thanks for review on my story and keep up the good work on yours.

Ja ne!

I don't quite know how to describe my feelings for this story. It was good yes, but made me think alot. Excellent work though! And very worthy of a sequel.

I always do like humorous stories and your story is one of the funniest I have seen around here. I'll try and read your other stories as well.

thats really cool, I like the theroy...hee hee

I updated the chosen, well i thouched it up, re wrote parts and added bits, its much better AND (you'll be happy about this bit) its in paragraphs and is spaced properly...yay!

Rock On the Post Its and Klenix!

I thought this was very clever. I am not of any beliefs myself, but I do enjoy learning about all of them. Nice twist at the end with the evolution/monkeys spreading HIV parallel. Gives a person (even just one of us atheists) a lot to think about...oh, and I very much enjoyed the discussion about "Juniors." =) MLK was definitely a step above evolution.

some notes
"he smelled of singed feathers" i dont know what you were going for here but i'd probably use the more compact 'his feathers smelled singed'
ending phrases with prepositions (tsk tsk tsk) "to which of them you gave divine right" instead?
the whole god-jesus exchange is a bit awkward and out of place, but i understand that you need it to make your point on what he didn't know at the beginning, but is there a better way to do it?
"over enthusiastic at the prospect" is a bit awkward, your blending 2 working phrases, ('over enthusiastic' and 'not seeming enthusiastic at the prospect of doing something') but they don't seem to blend well here, maybe drop the "over"?
the MLKjr. reference, too, is another forced example
what does lucifer have to do with anything?
I like plaugue's idea.
The last scentance should be its own paragraph, its just really uber awkward on the end of the quote

I liked this story alot, its refreshing to see someone who has faith but is not blinded by it, someone who's fear is in the right place (with man, not with god)
Do you plan to update? I'd like to hear plaugues report, also, it might be nice if you explained the bit about lucifer more

I also wanted to thank you soo much for reviewing my stories, I'll try to return the favor, but i'm a bit tired so i may not get them all done in one block

zac

Cute. I've deserted my Christian beliefs years ago, so I can enjoy the irony and humor of your story.

Interesting twist with the HIV virus. But I'm sure that those into conspiracy will not agree with you...

Overall, a very entertaining story. I liked it a lot.

that is really cool. i really liked so im going to hate myself for pointing out your historical inaccuracy. but, throughout the whole story you have made it seem like we are past the year 20 but HIV has been known about for a while now . . . your choice whether you want ot fix it or not, i htink it works well enough anyways