This was well written... I must admit I got a little lost in the middle, but found my way eventually. The repetition was very well done. I particularly liked the last paragraph or so when the third repetition came in.

Holy smokes... that was incredible, m'dear. Simply incredible; I loved the way you repeated the first paragraph two more times, slightly changing it to add a poignant effect. Truly wonderful work!
P.S - I cannot tell you how my spirits lifted when I saw your reviews... much more, when I checked and saw that you had MY STORY, my rubbish story in your favorites. Furthermore, you put me in your favorites... that is a MASSIVE compliment, and I want to say a very sincere 'thank you'.
P.S.S - I will get to reading more of your work after exams; I simply cannot read more without jepordizing my chances of doing well. :) I WILL get to it though, just be patient. God bless!

i love the way u repeat the first and last lines, each time noting the changes in the story, yet keeping the setting in place...

awesome. ^_^

This is awesome, well beyond awesome. You wrote a great story for and English paper thing. You definately have a way with words. Your description and purposeful dialogue.Great. Very inspirational. This one is going on my faves.

Gnat

I really liked this. It was very moving, and this coming from someone who doesn't belive in religion. Well, i don't know how to explain it. I believe in a higher power, just... one that can't be defined.

Anyway, I thought it was beautifully written, and I enjoyed reading it. Thank you for writing it. ^_^

Much love,
Sarah

absolutely fabulous. beautiful imagery.

Wow, that story was honestly moving. The vivid descriptions really brought it to life, as well. Two thumbs up, lol!

-Kara

Sarah you have an awesome gift for writing. Never forget that!

-Luv-
Amber

That was really good- your description is really good and made the story really touching. I liked the message of hope it gave and how it ended. Your writing is very, very good!
Now I'm gonna go and read that story you told me about!

Wow. That was beautiful. I just couldn't stop reading it. Even though I don't write religous works, I love to read them. Great story.

Very good. I like the way it was written... :) Keep it up!

This is so beautifully written. You're a very talented author, and it's amazing how you can convey so much meaning in such a short story.

hey. this is brittany from church and i just want to say this is amazing. i enjoyed reading it. it was so good i never wanted it to end. it was just really good. i'll tty at church

Sarah,
Awesome story. Brings back memories in a funny way, you know? Great job! I relaly enjoyed reading it. Have an awesome week.

Love in Him,
Suzanne

wow.