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| the mouse that roared 2004-05-11 ch 1,  | abuseI really like the theme of inner vs. outer beauty. And the acceptance of what is in the mirror. |
| Vivienne Cen 2003-07-22 ch 1, | abuseI really like this song. I can almost hear it in my head ^^. I really like the way you end it with a positive note. |
| Angel 2003-04-29 ch 1, anon. | abuseGreat song love the chorus. |
| Kanefan123 2002-12-11 ch 1, | abuseHey, that was good, I liked it.... sorry it took so long to review I've been BUSY lol. I really liked how it was written as a song but the way it was written was very poetic... I'm sick of all the songs out there written to be songs.... Where's the art? Good work |
| the Queen of Jupiter 2002-12-04 ch 1, | abuseWow, I love this song! -Well, the lyrics, at least. I especially love how you *finally* completed the Chorus at the very, very end - sort of like the whole song was leading up to that line. Very powerful song. Keep writing! Peace ~~> |
| Needa S 2002-12-03 ch 1, | abuseThumbs-up! Keep writing! |
| SweetGrape 2002-11-30 ch 1, | abuseNice rhymes and rhythm make this suitable for a song. Inspiring and insightful piece about accepting yourself- which is an important idea:) Very involving and easy to realte to, straight from the nice first lines. 4th line of 2nd stanza is nice 'in me', nice idea and alliteration. The chorus is beautiful- intersting descriptions and ideas of yourself. 'I know I'm afraid' also shows the emotions involved in accepting yourself- it's not all easy. Contrast and cleverly showing how you can be 2 ends of the spectrum. Lots of inspiring, smiley ideas. 'she'll shine out by herself'. Cute- 'I'm a play on the words' 'It's broken light, after all' I loved that line for some reason- just seems so frank and honest and laughing. Great last line- very nice:) |
| frommysoul 2002-11-11 ch 1, | abuseSelf reflection is very important in life, and i don't just mean physically as you don't either. I like the line, how simple it is,"that's just me." We should all say that and be content. Our looks and behaviours are all part of who we are and without them, we would be nothing. An inspiring piece of work |