ah, this is so beautiful! its like, a burst of light. like the desperate and yearning thoughts of a wayward being pulled hither and nearer to the one being which it plots the course of its existence around-the place on the map where all lines meet. all eyes meet. its wonderful

Nice!

i have read only two poems of yours and i am already in awe (not to mention a tad embarassed of my own paltry pieces) :}. this poem is unbelievable.

Ah, so pretty! I like this one a lot. This has that...worldliness about it, the connection between the subject and the universe. I enjoy how you used the repetition of the verbs and colors, it creates an effect like the poem is spinning. Unlike some of your other poems, this one has a peaceful air about it. It's a very pleasant read.

This is really good, especially the imagery and your use of adjectives and language.