Do you know the most horrible and joyous truth of the human heart? That the heart should heal, that it should forget its pain in the presence of joy and love. As you displayed in the first couple of stanzas, you were left in a cold, barren world of ice and darkness. But as the poem reached the second to last verse, you saw a glimmer and quote, "What joy love hath!" Now, I am not trying to undermine anything in your poem. It is quite appetizing, in fact!It is just that, I abhor my human heart, and wish to lose it. And your poem showed the humaness that I can never lose. My hat off to you, Lone Hawk.

Dude...

Poems are not all about Images of Beauty and Nature Umi, there are other forms of Imagery

One more thing, its not very nice to say "this is one of your worst"

I accept constructive criticism, but thats just not nice.

-Green Yoshi the Pissed-

It's Umi again.

This one's is your worst, but still pretty good. It lacks the incredible imagery that you used in your other poems, and it sounds like it was written in your early days of writing. Hey, it's probably better than some stuff that I've got.

-Umi the Blue Haired

Wow. Awesome work.

"Here I inhabit,

Here I will stay.

Here I will rot and,

Here I'll decay."

Those were my favorite, excellent lines. Keep writing!

its not to bad. i like. do u think you could come and check out some of my poems?

wooaahh...

I'm living alone

In my spiraling world,

Watch as it plummets,

How quickly it hurls.

I love that stanza! Spiraling world... lol, I don't know what I love about that so much but it's just so _ . Can I steal it? lol, jk. Good job!

Yet in the deepest darkness there is a light.

A wonderful poem...

One stanza stuck out to me however.

"No light shines before me

To guide me away

No guardian angel

To help he who strayed"

A contrast to previous works?

Hm... I like the ryhming! You should write more! *o*

Simply great. Very good imagery and description. I like it a lot. Keep up the good work.