Shudders. How chillingly pretty, ducks. i think Lilith and your psychopathic side would get along well (Lilith being my darker side). Very good indeed. Even though it was a bit awkward in places.

awesome poem lot likeish ones I write ~Kenya~

I like this. It's nice and dark and morbid. Morbidity is the best thing in the world. Hehehehe...mor-bid-i-teeee.....*clears throat* ANYWAY!! The only thing I don't like too well is the last two lines...it just doesn't seem right. But that's just one person's opinion and the ranting of a psychopath so, take it or leave it. Check out some of my stuff pleeez... Good job again.
Licia aka Persley Snow

Did I tell you on your journal that I liked these? 'Cause I don't remember. I think the second one's better than the first, but that might just be because I like the last bit: "i took them off a dying man."

*claps for you*

*Holy **.*

Grrr. Why do you get all the poetry writing talent?! This is superb. (And "superb" isn't a word I'm generally comfortable with.)