Cool man, you didn't rhymn but the imagery was great. Makes me want to actually read the story.

Interesting, I wonder what the story is like. The style is different than what I've seen before, breaking up statements onto different lines. I like how it emphasizes how unique the girl/goddess is. My only critique is that maybe it could be a little longer or have some imagery in it. But that's just my style, so if you don't want to, you don't have to change anything. Overall a good piece, I enjoyed it. Feel free to stop by my site and take a look at some of my work if you wish.

Good structure, well written. Poor misunderstood Artemis :( Though here I was thinking she was just retarded...