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| Alexia S. Luclwit 2003-09-13 ch 1,  | abuseI like street-lamps at night, expecially during festival, and they are all crowded, with the stars so bright in the black velvet above... |
| pleasecometrue 2003-04-15 ch 1, | abuselove it, good write. |
| Morbane 2003-03-24 ch 1, | abuseThat's beautiful. Especially, the beautiful rhythm. It's completely natural and sometimes seems playful - such as in the lovely singsong line 'we live in a world of eyes open wide'. Some poems seem as if they should rhyme, but don't quite, and yours gives me the feeling of rhyme without it really being present. I'm rambling, obviously. Exquisite, with the kind of clarity I ascribe to really good poetry. And beautiful. In the beginning, it sounds more concrete, less fanciful, and we get drawn into fancy. And I appreciate the last two lines. |
| E. Gao 2003-02-03 ch 1, | abuseAbsolutely gorgeous. This is the quintessential nocturnal poem - I love the night, and I love the stars and how everything is soft and spilled, and I hate how the sun gives me headaches and blindspots. Amen. ^_^ ~EG |
| Paradoxical Goddess 2002-12-20 ch 1, | abuseRemember me...? I'm not dead! Whee! ANyway, like your poem though I'm generally wary of love-ish ones. :) *thumbs up* |
| Aviendha19 2002-12-05 ch 1, | abuseah, that was so beautiful. i love it. it is so alone and secluded, so lonely and sad, so yearning and soft. its like a song that melts you, a composer in his quiet pain that shares it only with a silent listener. i love this so much. your poetry is sublime, i must tell you. im in awe. lorraine |
| kealohikakahiaka 2002-12-03 ch 1, | abuseI love this. Poetic, flow-y, profound but not overly so. Great poem. |
| Rose of Dresden 2002-11-26 ch 1, | abuseah wow, god, this is so lovely and delicate and sad, and it makes me think of so many things, and it's oh-so-beautiful! ach your work makes me think of dreaming marlena |
| aintawoman 2002-11-24 ch 1, | abusewow. so true, and kind of sad though, ya know? i myself am partial to the moonlight. and darkness. and denial. ;O) very very good. |
| Faith In A Bad Guy 2002-11-24 ch 1, | abusethat is true, the light 'is' more difficult |