Oh my... quite frightening! But, I can see this picture of this maid... good imagery!
~Caelestius Zaden

:-D cool chick huh? hee hee. very scary! a nightmare?

Wow. Yes, wow. Just, wow. That's a homina homina right there. You have an incredibly artistic and wonderful and hot mama! command over the language, and when you put it into poetry, it's just wow o wow o wow o wow o WOW! Find me whenever you like if you need to hear more blubbering. You know it's good when someone's speechless.

Hehe Wow that was a good one!! Great poem, great for the themes of a trickster or temptress. Realy liked this one.

kewl! this poem sounds familiar, my mom used to tell me a story like this (don't ask me why) I think it's a Russian folktale...'dios

This is so SWEET!

Red staning white never ceases to have the same dramatic poetic effect... innocence corrupted... or in this case supposed innocence which masks darkness. Nice use of lingual light and shadow.

awesome! it actually rhymes and makes since unlike most poetry where i have to think deeply forever to figure out what its about.

wow this is really good! very powerful. nice imagery. k/w!

eeeeeepp...~hides~...della needs a HUG!!!!!!~glomps della~

Wow- i really like it. Twisted, as all of your poems are, but I actually like it for a change (don't hurt me- I don't really mean that.) Imagery is very nice, and yeah. Spiffy. Good stuff. I like.



Minnnnnty minty minty fresh!

Critically - awesome poem, good form, old gel
personally - YARG!!! THE ANGST!!! IT BURNS MY MIND!!!!