this' great! i like your ideas and creativity, it adds a nice realistic feel to it ^_^. it went a little fast at parts, and i kinda got some names mixed up ?_? just add some more words/descriptions and it'll be easier to remember, other than that it's very kewl ^_^. write more soon, i can't wait to read it!

Impressive. I love all your names for things, especially in the prologue. Keep it coming, I'm looking forward to finding out what happens next!

Alex

Promising so far, I can't wait to read the rest!