This really hurts...I liked the way you fit in the catchphrase. A few things bugged me...I want to know more about her, but I suppose this is suppose to focus on his death, and her reaction to it, so I guess...

Nice work anyway.

so i dont get it did he die?/

newayz dis wuz good but u repeated the same line da begining and da end.

I loved it, it was beautiful...*smiles slightly*

it's a bitty pretty.

I already told you what I think of this. 'Tis very beautiful and haunting.

Very expressive, very good.

Beautiful and serene, even through such a catastrophic time, she remains true to him, true to loving him; even though he is a war victim, leaving her in a painful and distraught predicament being a love lorn women left behind with the ashes and tears of what shouldn't have been. Absolutely overpoweringly intoxicating! Definitley going into the faves daaaaahling!

*shivers* Ooh. . . creepy ending, with just the twist of haunted memory to lend an edge to the story.

*clears throat* Eh eh ehm!

She never looks back!

Oh, she always looked good dressed in black!

Oooohhhhhhh!

You're so special!

Ooooohhhhhh!

Who gives a-

Do you want to play?

Er...sorry. Diva-esque Jewel moment there. :)

Wow, if I was you I'd take this one down pronto and start submiting it to magazines and contests. this is really very well written. Much better than the usual teen stuff here.

very beautiful descriptions. very powerful-very nice.

*applause slowly builds* Yeah Norah...you go lil dancer grrrl!