Oh..I really love this story, and its cute.I'm waiting for the next chapters.I love YAOI...good job!

wow amazing it was really good update soon

almost 3 years since you updated...
i didnt realize it had been that long... and i was just curious, are you ever going to finish this?

Cool , I like this story ^^

Aww~~ Beck's all jealous like. Its cute. Hopefully you'll find the time to update soon (and then not have two year spans between updates). I wanna know what happens next! This is me pouting and giving you puppy dog eyes.

Wow, I love this story! Any chance of it still being updated...? I suppose the last chapter was posted after a two year delay so there's still hope :P

I really hope you do update this. It's very intersting and you left off at such a part you can't help but wonder what's going to happen next.

Holy... O.O Sgt. Douglas IS in two stories! In "For Love Of Evil" it said she had been in Japan, and here she is! I can't help but wonder if there'll be vampires (or other supernatural creatures) in this story.

In Spanish, Angel would be pronounced AHN-hell. For some reason you added an extra syllable.

Livi

Wow. That's the only thing I can think to say at the moment. Gimme a minute so I can arrange my thoughts into something legible. x.x

Oh. Em. Gee! I feel like jumping around and squealing and glomping you to pieces. Madison is so ADORABLE! It doesn't even matter if this story has no plot (says you)! It's so cute!

Madison and Marnica's relationship reminds me of how things used to be between me and my little brother. We siblings abuse each other so much. But you still captured those nearly invisible moments of familial concern. It made me smile, even if I do dislike the little brat's attitude.

Let me also say that it was extremely enjoyable to get to know Beck and Milo. They are a hilarious pair! And Gabriel. Or Goliath. Just thinking about him and Milo together is giggle-worth. Hee.

Beck is especially interesting to me. So far it sounds like the majority of your characters have some kind of traumatic problem and/or past. His ‘mask’, as Milo so conveniently made it apparent, is appealing and at the same time disgusting. Of course, I lean more towards the appealing.. His hair amuses me. Beck equals Blue. And now I’m going to go around and grin at anything blue and more than likely scare a few children in the process. I blame your talent!

And his mask isn’t even the most elaborate. Stephen. Now… -giggle- Stephen reminds me of a guy that was in my drama class last year. We called him the God of Hair when we were doing King Midas and the Golden Touch. And that’s who I think of when I read for Stephen. I remember his brief mention in the first chapter. It really makes one wonder what kind of problems he could have. You made a brief mention of him having money problems, but that can’t –really- be the source of an identity crisis.

And then we have his relation with Madison. The more I think about it, the more I prefer the idea of dear little Maddie being with Beck. When I think about the little I know of Stephen, I see him as more of a kindred spirit to Madison. Someone who could be –so- close, in a way of thinking, and come to a self-realization. Thus turning Maddie into a catalyst towards the repairing of his and Beck’s ‘relationship’. Considering their personalities, they’d probably make great friends if Stephen dropped the preppy front.

I dragged myself back to little boy blue.. he’s fascinating! He needs someone. Liberty was nice to read in this chapter, but I can’t see her getting close enough to Beck for any of the repairing he needs. And that one chapter! The phone call! I’m -confused-! Was Maddie’s ‘great idea to help him’ proving Beck wrong about the caste system? Or was it something else? I know they hardly know each other yet, but I –know- it’s dang possible for that kid to do a whole lot of good for Beck! Please?

I’m sorry. It’s been a while since I’ve felt the desire to analyze other peoples’ characters. Haha. I love the way you’re letting it play out so far. I don’t think you need to rewrite it at all! Just please don’t let it drop. I’ve been enjoying this immensely for the past two days, and from the looks of it, a lot of other people have liked it too. –sends a jealous look to the number of reviews- So keep it up, ne? Oh! And e-mail me or something; I’d like to get to know a great writer. –insert big happy face- And it’d be great to know if I nailed any guesses on the head. –wink-

Lurve, Kiy-chan

Seargant Douglas is in two stories! Just one of the first things I noticed while reading this chapter.

Although I typically don't go for romance stories that don't also include the supernatural, I like this; it's well written. I /have/ noticed a tendency to put three or four possible subjects in a paragraph, and then add in a pronoun that doesn't refer to the last subject. Here's an example:

"Beck blinked and looked at Milo, who shrugged. Maddi did the same. "Parts?" he asked. "What parts?"

"If you'd been paying attention, Preston, you would know, wouldn't you?"

When I read that section, I thought that "he" referred to Madison, until I got to the second part. It's not a big problem or anything; it just disrupts the flow of the story slightly.

Speaking of Maddi, I'm kind of worried about him. He seems to think with his heart instead of his head, which is a really good way to get hurt badly very quickly.

YAY! I'm glad I poked around for updates today! its going good and I COMPLETELY understand not updating ... ^_^ so its cool I'll just keep my eyes peeled!

Just finished reading all seven chapters, just today... I'm home sick, so you really spared me from boredom, Xandra-sama. ^^I like the story, more so later into it...and I think Madison is just about my favorite character in any of your stories right now. ^.^

-Ravy

Wow, I love your story so far. And i love madison he is just so cute. And Liberty, she's funny.. Update soon please!~