in your summary for this story, you misspelled equipment

sword in the stone- a common element of fantasy

I jumped foreword,"a foreword is like a prologue, you mean forward

"as sword came up"should be as the sword came up

"the platforms that were my exit and the mound of rock that looked as if it was not from my planet that I was standing on would sink into the lava. "woah! long sentence without any commastry it this way:'the platforms that were my exit, and the mound of rock, that looked as if it was not from my planet, that I was standing on, would sink into the lava. see- much clearer now

"Somewhere I had read that it took the surfaces a full minute to submerge so I thought for a second until it hit me, quite literally"should be a comma after submerge

" I ran out of the hole and did a flip while twisting around so I landed on both feet and facing the opposite direction I should have been. "comma after around, and after feetit should be "direction that I"

"I muttered to myself as I saddled up. "why? what did he mutter> what emotion caused his muttering?

"and be able to defeat Morical."shoudl be "and to be able"

"One scabbard with ice magic.check,"just use a comma not a full stop please same after fire magicactually, same all through this sentence.full stops ONLY at ends of sentences