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| Cariwyn 2005-08-16 ch 10,   | It's done! NO! Lol. I love that Selene and Cara come back. It really completes it. Wonderful story, all in all. I hope you enjoyed my reviews (however short and dorky) they were even a fraction as much as I enjoyed this story. Take care and keep writing, Cariwyn |
| Cariwyn 2005-08-16 ch 9, | Arie dies for her people! For the innocents! Yeah! Then comes back as an elf to live with Caylin forever...Too bad Magicus and Leo and Josh and her dad will one day die. This was a good chapter. I liked that the "final showdown" was in front of everyone. By the way, I love the name Allyson. Spelled that way. I decided about a year ago that if I ever have a daughter, that'll be her name. But not anytime soon... |
| Cariwyn 2005-08-16 ch 8, | Arie is brave to leave alone. Rylas, trying to flirt with Arie? Tsk, tsk. The battle approaches... |
| Cariwyn 2005-08-16 ch 7, | Poor Cara. I love the end of this chapter. It's so...uplifting, I guess. I love when people ride to battle, to honor, to death. Not in a morbid way, but it's great seeing the strength and courage and love of the heroes. |
| Cariwyn 2005-08-16 ch 6, | Aww..Stella is a little good afterall. I'm so proud of her. :). Lol. |
| Cariwyn 2005-08-16 ch 5, | The queen's nice in her own way. And Alex does have the traces of niceness (he let Arie go to Caylin, but then that was for another purpose too). Arie is a strong girl, emotionally and physically. It's strange to think that she's only fourteen, but that's the glory of fictional characters. |
| Cariwyn 2005-08-16 ch 4, | Caylin and Arie captured! Caylin is really sweet... |
| Cariwyn 2005-08-16 ch 3, | Aww...sweet Caylin. Bastard Leo. Sweet Chance. Brother-type Josh. Haha. |
| Cariwyn 2005-08-16 ch 2, | Hmm...the truth about Chance is revealed. Good chapter, again. |
| Cariwyn 2005-08-16 ch 1, | I read this whole story months ago, but decided to reread it. Ok, for this chapter: I know you're not likely going to edit it, but it's a little rushed. All the background was revealed in one chapter. The confrontation with Arie's father came so quickly...but I guess you didn't want to make this story too long. It's good though. |
| ScourgeoftheSpanishMain 2004-12-29 ch 10, | I'm sorry to say this, but your story could have been a lot better. It lacked detail and beacuse of that half the time I didn't know what was going on. I read your pirate/thief story and was impressed, so I know you can write better. If you really care about this story, I suggest you rewrite it. Also, your main character seemed, well, airheaded. Sorry. The plot seemed disjointed and half the time you didn't know why people did things. All of a sudden someone rides off into the blue.I think you are a good writer, though, and this is obviously some of your earlier work. |
| Hotkitty 2004-06-19 ch 10, | this was really gud 4 a first fic, u write just like i do in destinys hand (ithats my first 1) i liked this and i hope u update ur other stories soon, 2 bad about there being no sequel. |
| Hotkitty 2004-06-19 ch 9, | kz 1 more chappie 2 go, truthfully 4 sum reason i wanted her 2 go with leo but i dunt mind caylin so np. |
| Hotkitty 2004-06-19 ch 8, | poor corion. well just a lil left now. |
| Hotkitty 2004-06-19 ch 7, | i liked cara, 2 bad... |