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| communist daughter 2002-12-23 ch 1,  | abusethis story, like some of your others, has a very interesting microcosm/macrocosm conflict going on - on one hand, Daniel is an observer, yet he also pictures himself in his surroundings as opposed to just his surroundings. your language is scaling - 'the Big Store', 'penguin bodies', and i think it serves as the ammonia of truth across the grimy floor of capitalism. |