i like this, but it seemd more like part of a story. are you going to continue it? i like your writing style. sort of interesting and tough. not too descriptive.

bittersweet...encouraging yet discouraging at the same time. are you planning to write more? *sticks her lip out in a pout* please?
and this fortuna character intrigues me...it was great how you worked him into the story, and i'd love to see him in others. bravo on a story well written!