I think this is a good idea; like friendship, dreams are difficult to write about and you've pulled it off nicely. However, I think that the format is a little odd; did you mean to make the lines so long? I think you need to break up the lining a bit. And, once again, I think you could do more with this without trying to rhyme. Play around with it; see what you can do.

Keep writing!

~Weeba~

Its lovely rhyming (not sure I spelled that right but heck owell) and great writing in my opinion, even if it is short! Keep writing poems like this :)

It does sound professional. I really like how it's written. Sounds deep.

I like the rhythm of it. Nice job.