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b 2007-12-17 ch 3,	this is fantastic and i wish you'd kept writing it. man, now i know how my own readers felt! ^^; i love the tension between ethan and kale, ethan's too cute.
Runwithscythes 2007-06-04 ch 3,	So close and yet so far...
Prisoner-11 2006-05-16 ch 3,	Come on Ethan! Kiss Kale again!
Hell's first Icicle 2005-11-22 ch 3,	he he... u abandoned...ALL of them? breaks down and sobs l0lz. well i'll just read them newayz, then finish up with "the control" =D coz u write such wunderful stories! dus happy dance ...yes..
Tully 2005-09-08 ch 3,	more more twitch oh please write more.. :( i can pay you...in..gratitude :D such a clifhanger! love the characters, must know what happens next! Peace & Love!Tulliver ^_~
City Lights Burn Like Stars 2005-01-22 ch 3,	i like it i love it i want some more of it! ^^ update soon
subtleline 2004-12-21 ch 3,	This is interesting. I like Kale. Luved the whole 'I'm gay' conversation. grin Update soon kay. Ethan needs a good slap. I want to see if he get's it.
Heart O'fire 2004-07-13 ch 3,	I loved it so much. It is some of the best slash I have seen in a LONG time. The only drawback is the non-ending.
Wolfwitch 2004-05-04 ch 3,	Oh! I found this again! Yayness. Tis muchly good. Want more.
Lady Kickass 2004-01-04 ch 3,	cool story! continue please!!
Lira-chan 2003-12-04 ch 3,	I get the title now sweatdrop I didn't think about it, after reading Ethan saying things were "Nervous Habits" all those times... Until now, when I read the title again,and laugh at my stupidity. Anyway- here we go. Aight. The Tara-woman is obviously bothering Ethan... But as of yet, I'm not sure if she's -trying- to, if she's flirting with him... Or what. Maybe I'm just not perceptive ^.^; I was going to poke Tara violently for the smooching-ness, but...: Ethan abruptly pulled away from her, laughing almost pathetically at himself as he sat back down in his chair. "Well that answers that.." Tara remained leaning slightly forward from him pulling away so suddenly, but quickly sat back, eyeing him uncertainly. "What?" Ethan turned to her, unable to conceal a small smile. "I'm gay." giggles helplessly Poor woman. But it's perfect. goes off to kidnap Kale I'll even let Ethan borrow him. Maybe. If one of the two figgers out what is going ON with them... laughs It's lovely, seriously. Lovely. "Oh my god," she shook her head slightly, taking a step back. "I turned you gay." By Ethan's silence, Tara grew pale. "I think I'm going to be sick." giggles helplessly I can almost feel sorry for her. Heh, no, Tara-babe, I think Ethan is in full control of his gay-ness... Or... whatever. ^.^ Ethan skidded to a halt outside Tristen and Kale's apartment. He silenced the engine and slipped out of his car, walking up to the building with a slight bounce in his step. He took the steps two at a time and made his way slowly to their door, regaining his breath as he knocked a few short times. Kale ran a hand through his untamed hair, simply allowing it to fall back to hang in front of his eyes as he pulled the door open. "Ethan?" he asked, his eyes widening noticeably. Ethan let his face fall, taking a few deep breaths as he spoke to regain his composure. "Tristen said you wouldn't be here." Yah no... If -I- heard something like that directed at me... I'd get kinda depressed. -.-; Ethan-love, you have no tact. (and to Kale! The sweetling! He'll get all... Sad-like) ^.^; I think Tristen was trying to set -something- up. And Kale locked himself out >.> He was less perturbed by Ethan's lack of tact than I would have thought... But he still got all teary, so I can squeal and act fangirlish anyway. ^.^ "Who's the kid?" Ron asked, eyeing Kale expectantly from behind his desk. "We don't have a babysitter here, Ethan," he smirked. Kale eyed him uncertainly. "Well who watches you, then?" he shot back. Ethan paused, unable to conceal a smile as he turned around to glance at Kale in slight surprise. He turned to Ron a moment later, pointing over to Kale with a smirk, "What he said." giggles Nice. Very nice. "Kale made his way slowly around it, pulling out the comfortable chair and taking a seat behind the desk. He laid back a little, smiling at the relaxing comfort. He began to rock back and forth a little, giggling slightly." giggles herself Overall... Kale in the office is fun. He's just so cute.. And easily amused, ne? "He remained still, staring up at him quietly. He wanted to talk about what happened. He hated pretending it never happened, while it was eating away inside of him." Yes, talk. To Ethan: stop -avoiding- it, ya DWEEB! -.-; teary Little spat... And arguments over drunken-ness. Ethan thought Kale was drunk? giggles And insists that he -wasn't.- Psha, Ethan, you -had- to have been drunk. Silly man. But tis al god. "I wasn't drunk!" he repeated, lowering his voice after that outburst, "and I don't think it was a mistake." Kale gave him a small encouraging smile and shrugged a little, causing his large t-shirt he still wore to slip from his shoulder. Ethan reached down and slipped it back up onto his shoulder again before dropping his hand to his side lifelessly. "That keeps happening," he said quietly, staring at the hardly covered shoulder to avoid anymore of the pressing conversation. Kale shrugged his shoulder again purposely, allowing his shirt to fall again. "I noticed." There is a -lot- of stuff I wouldda quoted... But... Forcing your words atcha might get old, so... Just couldn't resist the last. Kale... So... Cute... dies Ethan's such a sweetie. Has strange morals. They -bother- me, damnit! But... Ah, I really do like this one. And... You haven't updated it in a long time... wistful sigh Does that mean I can borrow Kale until you need him for the story again? Huh? Huh? giggles Anywho... Oh, I'm just dreadfully fond of this, now. ^.^ I'm glad I read. Very glad. Shall have to spaz at you later. As "in person" as it gets- AIM! XD ~Lira-chan~
Lira-chan 2003-12-04 ch 2,	giggles I just wanna start reading... But my ranting requires some introduction. Your introduction? I'm rather fond of the names, actually. I love the name Ethan (...possibly because... Ever heard of a webcomic called "Your Wings Are Mine"? Tis pretty and shounen-ai. And there's an Ethan. Plus I just like the name ^.^) I love Kale's name, too... I just do. I love his name, I love him... He's so -cute- And the ranting begins. "Shut the ** up!" Tristen yelled, tossing one of Kale's sneakers at the closed bedroom door from the couch. And we start things off with a bang? grin quirks a brow Let's see where this is going, shall we? "Am I annoying?" Tristen smirked sarcastically, "No, I enjoy being hit and screamed at by you." Kale whined, "You suck." "You take a bit getting used to, that's all," Tristen shrugged, watching Kale sit beside him. "Ethan hates me," Kale mumbled. "I hate it when he's mad at me." Much quoting! cuddles Kale He's worrying about Ethan... Aww... How cute... ^>^ But seriously. Kale and Tristen's interactions are FUN. "Well, I'm used to having someone in the room with me when I sleep, so usually when I wind up at Ethan's we just sleep in his bed." Tristen raised a brow, finding it just a slight bit odd that Kale hasn't picked up on the fact that it's odd for two guys to share a bed. "Okay." giggling Tristen should know Kale by now... He's so INNOCENT and SWEET and I -love- him. May I please kidnap your character? I'll feed him good! [/purposeful bad grammar] Tristen watched Kale carefully, smirking a little. "You got in bed with him." The first one made me giggle. Now I'm giggling more. Kale's just so -clueless- and it's brilliant. "He doesn't want to be my friend, does he?" Kale asked hesitantly. "Well do friends try to get down your pants?" Tristen rolled his eyes at Kale. Kale raised a brow, eyeing Tristen carefully, "There was that one time you were drunk.." giggling helplessly The part before this, about Kale "dying in his sleep" was -also- fun-ness muchly. You rock. cuddles Kale is priceless. The exchange about "is Kale gay?" is also priceless, but... There's just too much to quote. ^.^; Three girlfriends... And many, -many- guys. XD Kale's lovely. "Look, if you're gay. whatever. I really don't care." "What if I'm not?" Tristen eyed him pathetically, smirking. "You are." [insert the two of them acting like four-year-olds] And then Tristen "wins," and... XD XD XD Tristen laughed, "I win? What the hell does that mean?" Kale grinned, wrapping his arms around Tristen's waist and pressing the side of his face against Tristen's chest. "I'm gay!" "Well duh," Tristen rolled his eyes, pushing Kale away, "Now get off me." I just loved this to death, alright? ^.^ "He didn't feel like telling her about his unhealthy feelings that he'd developed for their young friend. He didn't want to sound pathetic and he didn't want to risk losing Lana as a friend." Hey... I'm quite entertained by said "unhealthy feelings" I like the entire "Hey Kale, you can't see Ethan 'cause he's with Lana/Hey Ethan, you can't see Kale 'cause he's with Tristen" thing. So pretty! giggles And Ethan's just too much fun. Po' po' man... giggles ...Ethan's drinking? Vodka? Somehow... He doesn't come off as a drinker. I interpret this as depressed Ethan drowning his sorrows. Only then Kale shows up. Fun. "It takes quite a bit of alcohol to get Ethan drunk and from the practically empty bottle of Vodka on the table it was apparent that was what had happened." Either he's naturally tolerant, or he -is- a drinker. Just... Not the same sorta drinker as Kale. Don't think so. cuddles Ethan Childling, childling... Drinking won't solve your problems. "Kale wrinkled his brow a bit at the tone in Ethan's voice. "Don't treat me like *, Ethan," he sighed." Where have we heard that before? "That's twice today." Thank you, Ethan. giggles* "As Ethan released the bottle, he turned to face Kale, immediately leaning into his lips, capturing them against his own and remaining motionless for a moment. Ethan might have been drunk and that may have contributed to his sudden rush of courage, but he knew what was happening and he allowed all his feelings that he had been having recently for Kale flow through him. He gently moved his lips against Kale's, grasping the smaller boy's arms, desperately trying to press their bodies against one another." Wai! You go, Ethan! more helpless giggling I couldn't quote t3h cuteness... But... Wai! Drunk Ethan! ^.^; Erm... That's a -bad- thing, but he entertained me, so I'm happy. But then... But then... "Only now did Kale hear the slur in his words. He felt a pang of fear as he searched the cabinets for something to clean wood with. He had to get the stain up before Ethan sobered up. He had to get out of the apartment. He didn't want to be around when Ethan realized what they had just done." sigh Timid little Kale. I love him, and yet... Complications. Reading more. "Kale grimaced and fished a set of keys out of his pocket. He held them up and shrugged pathetically. "Oh no," Lana shook her head slowly. "Don't tell me." "You took his ** car?!" Tristen laughed." has just CRACKED UP laughing Oh, that's lovely. ^.^ The -entire- conversation with Lana, Tristen and Kale made me smile and giggle muchly... But there's one last fun quote. "You make me sick!" Kale shouted from the end of the hall. "You're the one who likes dick!" Tristen leaned out of the apartment, shouting back at him." giggles Tristen's fun, right? I loves t3h Ethan and t3h Kale more, but Tristen's useful. Thank goodness there's another chapter. Else I'd have to yell at you, for the semi-cliffie. Myrr... Twouldn't be nice, not to know what happened to drunk Ethan... ~Lira-chan~
Lira-chan 2003-12-04 ch 1,	My judgement scares me. I decided I'd either read this next... Or... Well this summary charmed me: "I really don't see how guys can be attracted to whiny, pathetic, giggling girls. I mean, come on. I can whine. I can giggle. And I've got something girls don't." So it was one or the other... But I see nineteen chapters, and I see three chapters, and I didn't look at the word counts... So I figured I might actually finish this before I gotta leave. And then... Look how long the chapter is! 0.0 shock But that's a good thing. For you are a pretty authoress, and you'll keep me amused. This is going to be a long "review." I don't write reviews. I write rants. Semi-MST-style. Love me. Is it really me, or... I dunno, Kale seems cute, but... You still seem just a bit detached. Meh. Too many authoresses. Their different writing styles are warping my brain. @.@ Kale leaned into Ethan and sighed contently, still holding his hand. "You smell good." "You smell like alcohol," Ethan smirked, dropping Kale's hand. "I'm sorry," Kale lowered his head and whimpered. Ethan sighed, conscious of Kale's sensitivity. See, I like that. I like the dialogue... And I see the scene very clearly, because of the way you've described it. To me: very matter-of-fact. Perhaps that's why it came off as detached at first... It's not detached, just so FACTUAL. My other authoresses aren't so matter-of-fact-like. ^.^; Do I make sense? Early morning = funky criticism. Kale reached up and grabbed Ethan's shirt, pulling him down to the bed as well. Ethan shook his head. "No, come on, stop, go to sleep." Obviously, there's more; you wrote it and you know. But I -like- the interaction. Ethan comes off as one of those "nice guys." Kale just appeals to me, 'cause I think he's cute. sweatdrop "But I'm just going to sleep," Kale replied innocently. Innocently. Ha. And the comment about how it's Ethan's bed. I'm onto you, Kale-bebby. foolish me "Night Ethan," Kale mumbled, snaking his arm around his friend's waist and curling comfortably against his back. Ethan tensed, closing his eyes a moment before relaxing again and lifting Kale's arm off of him, dropping it back behind him. Kale groaned something inaudible and replaced his arm around Ethan again, sighing contently. Ethan sighed. "Night Kale." Lira loves t3h dynamics... Or... Yanno what I mean, right? Psha, Ethan's too nice for his own good, ain't he? And Kale shouldn't drink. But I think I like him. "Lately Ethan had been noticing his feelings towards Kale had been changing, especially when he would show up frequently like this, being completely wasted and spending the night. Unfortunately, Kale barely remembered how he arrived at Ethan's, let alone the way he acted around him." Now our thoughts are more of the "poor Ethan" variety. Aww... Feelings are fun. ^.^ But... Meh... pokes Kale Ethan's too much of a nice guy to RAVISH his friend or anything, but... This bodes for good times, ne? "Ethan kept his eyes closed, silently missing the comforting arm around him." This is where I smile slightly, mentally think "Aww... Poor baby" and then run off to prod Kale hopefully. Sweet little children. The entire issue with the towel. Ethan's worried about his lovely chairs? And... huggles Kale All touchy-sensitive-like. -I- like. beams more mental "aww"-ing His sensitive-ness... Just seems so -cute- to me. Constantly worrying about what Ethan's thinking, ne? I like. Yes, I like. (I realize this will be an insanely long rant. I can't help it. ^.^;) "Ethan glanced over at Kale and saw him straining up for a glass, standing on tiptoe and barely reaching the shelf. He got to his feet, taking his coffee mug with him as he walked over to Kale. Kale bit his bottom lip, stretching even more and lifting one foot up behind him. Ethan placed his mug in the sink and easily took a mug off the shelf, holding it out to Kale." There's a bit more, but... It's just the little things that I like. You've still got that matter-of-fact tone, but I think it's charming. Suits Kale and Ethan's personalities. Just makes me constantly think "Aww... The silly little sweetlings." grin "Kale placed a small kiss on the corner of Ethan's mouth quickly before pulling away and heading into the bedroom to get his shoes and jacket. Ethan sat there for a minute, staring off after Kale as he disappeared into his bedroom." He comes off as being so innocent! accusing (-.-; we know I likes) It's just... Cute, I think. Cute. Kale's tearing Ethan apart, and... He notices, but he doesn't understand. Also... I'd like to say that I admire your character's willpower. Were I a guy in Ethan's position... giggle Well, let's just say that Lira has very wimpy willpower. gigglefit The explanation of Kale and Ethan's situation- how they know each other, what they're doing with their lives. Dispassionate? It seems that way, a little, but... It just fits the story, yah no? Hrmm... Reading your own writing, do you see the matter-of-fact-ness as I see it? bemused I'm just curious. giggles at Kale and Tristen Nice. Interactions there are fun, ne? Bouncy little Kale and... Well, so far Tristen's just irritable. ^.^ "Get a room," Kale mumbled, beginning to ice the cake in front of him. "Shall we?" Lana grinned. Tristen turned around in Lana's hold, taking her arms lightly. "Let's go." They joke about it more than anything. Just... Nice. smile One thing. Right after that, you slip out of third and into first person, for just a few lines. Odd? [note: here I vanish, and return for the rest later. Insert some passing time] and Lira returns You know you like something when, while you're not doing it (in this case, reading it), your mind keeps spazzing, saying "hurry up and get back to what you -want- to be doing!" Yeah. I like this. Kale quickly appeared in front of Lana, beaming happily at the box. Tristen grabbed Kale's arm and pulled him away from the present. "It's for Lana. Not for you." Kale pouted and watched Lana take the box gently. "Thanks Ethan!" she smiled. First: Kale is adorable. Second: More proof that Ethan's a sweetie. Although he may just be a good friend. And... giggles helplessly at Lana and Kale's reactions So cute! ^.^ Tristen's getting Ethan to take Kale away. smiling foolishly Ethan comes off as too virtuous for any fun for me... But still... ^.^ Even if Ethan just wants to be with Lena. More Kale and Ethan-ness. "I don't want anything," Ethan sighed, pulling the unlocked door open and slipping into the driver's seat. Sure he doesn't. arches eyebrows giggles Okay, I'm just being foolish. Ethan thought for a moment and shrugged, "Nervous habit." Got a lot of those? In the car, with his arm... Then in the elevator, with the buttons. Mebbe it's a theme. giggle "I don't think I've ever stayed here when I wasn't wasted," Kale laughed shortly. "And you're proud of that?" It made me giggle. "The shirt he wore was three sizes too big for him and was hanging off one shoulder, but looked absolutely adorable. It covered almost all of his boxers, allowing about two inches of dark blue shorts to show." Squee! glomps him So... Kawaii... Ethan sighed, unknowingly staring at Kale's exposed shoulder. The smooth skin seemed so tempting as Kale tilted his head slightly, drawing Ethan's eyes slowly up his neck. Kale whined as he assumed Ethan was ignoring him and pulled up the shirt to cover his shoulder. "Come on, feed me!" Must ease up on t3h quotes... But Kale's insanely cute, and Ethan's just... "aww." Stupid nice boys... grumble grumble "Ethan winced slightly at the thought of Kale wearing tight clothes. He felt completely uncomfortable with Kale being there and thinking of him this way, but this was how it had been for the past month or so." snicker 'Nuff said. Kale shook his head, "No, this is comfy. It smells nice too." "It smells like me," Ethan replied quickly, glancing over at Kale. "I know," Kale smiled, watching Ethan quietly for a moment before turning and heading over to the pantry. grin All there is to it. Too much cuteness! XD "Ethan, unable to hear anything in his deep sleep, simply retracted his arms from the pillow beside him and rolled over to face the opposite direction, leaving the space beside him unoccupied. Kale smiled a little and lifted the edge of the blankets, slipping under them beside Ethan. He snuggled against Ethan's back, tucking his head down and rubbing his cold nose against Ethan's back gently. Ethan rolled over at the feeling, draping his arm over Kale, assuming nothing more than draping his arm over a pillow. Kale smiled and tucked his head under Ethan's chin easily, letting his hands rest between them." Completely unnecessary to shove so much of your own writing back down your throat... But I'll reread my own review months later, and I will -still- go "aww" at t3h adorable wittle Kale-child. Also... Kale bites his lip a lot, don't he? Stands out ^.^ "Ethan grunted a little, slowly coming out of sleep and let his eyes open slowly. It took him about a minute to realize who was in his bed and who he was holding so close to him. "What the *?!" Ethan exclaimed, sitting up and away from Kale." And you continue on from there, but... I just want to scoop Kale up and -kidnap- him, he's so shocked and worried and -adorable- grinning like a fool* And your careful descriptions really do fit their personalities. Just like Kale was thinking- "Ethan was always calm, collected, and organized." The way you wrote this suits that. ^.^ "I didn't mean to scare you." "You didn't." "Then why's your heart beating so fast?" Kale asked, leaving his head resting against Ethan's chest. happy sigh This is over one thousand words. Creepy, ne? But... Nyaah, I -like- I really like. It -did- take me a little while to get into your voice, after reading Mara and Hope's stuff... But I really love it, hey? Can I kidnap Kale? Please? He's just so -cute- wants to snuggle him ^.^ Now... Two more chapters. I'll rant less. You wrote less. But it's all GOOD! ~Lira-chan~
Monkiechi 2003-11-20 ch 3,	Kawaii...your story is soo cute >_
LeoraWolf 2003-10-31 ch 3,	Please update this, i really wan to know what's going to happen. I really like the story

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