I like it! *nods* I don't know what's bothering you about it...is it the "pure enough to save the world" line? It's the only line that seems specific and explanatory (if that makes any sense) while the rest of the poem seems more vague and mysterious. But it's a great poem! I can't write poetry. :( There's a biblical feel to it...or even something the chorus would chant in a Greek tragedy. Have you read much Euripedes? Not that I'm recommending it, mind you! ;P