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| Isca 2008-06-01 ch 1,  | abuseYou and I seem to have been the same person in the sixth grade ;). A forgotten being. Good emotion expressed in this. I liked the line, "My smile becomes mechanical." |
| wastedlovexxx 2003-11-18 ch 1, | abuseThis poem says so much.Is it you in the poem or is about somebody else.If it is you I know how you feel and if you ever need anybody to talk to just email me!! |
| Getuie 2003-11-12 ch 1, | abuseI know exactly how this feels... Amazingly written... This one must be my favourite of what I've read of your work |
| Keep it 100 2003-10-29 ch 1, | abuseYou presented such great details and images to convey that feeling of being neglected. Nice work. ~Heart of the Sword |
| Lekarthion 2003-08-19 ch 1, | abuseFirst of all, i really liked you're poem, secondly i'm going to make a comment on your poetry in general (I hope you don't mind) While I really like you're poems topics (they are wonderful), the poems themselves seem like free verse and/or poetics. I hope you don't mind my saying, but they don't seem to have a rythm or flow and the rhymes are generally hard to pick out. So I like your poems, but they seem a bit confusing...i don't know if anyone else felt this way, but that's my impression. (of course then again you may not care.) One more thing, in Ode to Sal, on line twenty-four, I'm not sure if you care to fix it, but you have a typo (i think) it says form rather than from. ok ya, i know, ridiculous isn't it, but i have this nasty habit of proofreading as i read. Sincerely, (and without meaning any offense) Lekarthion |
| Deana Bell 2003-06-12 ch 1, | abuseI loved the part about the smile becoming mechanical. Moving piece ~God bless~ |
| Etheral 2003-05-15 ch 1, | abuseOh My God! A Masterpiece! I love it! |
| AaZz 2003-01-20 ch 1, | abuseThat describes me perfectly! |
| SinNombre26 2003-01-06 ch 1, | abusethat is so sad!!!!! but its a good poem. |
| Hestia 2002-12-22 ch 1, | abuseIt's okay amateur poetry. It has no frame or plot though, and in all its free-form beauty it's just a bunch of sentence fragments one after the other. |
| Gothofvengance 2002-12-22 ch 1, anon. | abuseawesome. try combining long and short phrases together, it gives a really nice effect and would work particularly well in this one. how did you get it out of block form though? none of my stuff will space out. |