wow!! you are a very clever poet

yes- exactly- why are the innocent and the people (or birds) who live in an illusion so much happier than people who dont!

I like your style of writing. It certainly makes me think. (My friends would tell me that that's a great accomplishment on your part. ^_^ )

Interestin perspective.. I thought it was simply well done.. N i liked the last stanza most..

Strong and interspective. I really enjoyed the second to last stanza and the pay off at the end. My only suggestion would be to play with your line breaks. Try to end on a verb rather than a noun. Perhaps:

The birds outside my window,
Dancing in the morning glory,
Fluttering from branch to branch,
Singing many a fabled story.

Could be...

The birds outside my window, Dancing (linebreak)
in the morning glory, Fluttering
from branch to branch, Singing
many a fabled story.

Take the above only as a suggestion.

Thanks for sharing,

Lowell

Charming little poem, good pace and flows well. Using birds as the focus is the animal equivalent of how those mired in reality might view day-dreamers - good symbolism.

very nice.

short but strong. nicely done.

Fools are oblivious to the world and hence happy because they cannot see the pain we suffer. I like this one too. It makes you think.


Cat

It seems simple at first glance, but its really very deep! I can see the hidden meanings! Anyway, excellent! I really enjoyed it!

Holy spoon. You weren't lying when you said it was better than some of your others. You did this wonderfully, and the flow was awesome. Great job, and to put this simply, I love it. ^.^
~Toireasa

That's really good! Very pretty! It makes you think some also.

I like that. its very serene, and kind of deep. and it rhymes well too. I think the refrence to birds as "dancing" is cool, and i like they way you make them seem almost like people.

Ignorance is bliss. Your voice is getting stronger and stronger! If you gave me ten poems and one was yours I could probably pick it out! Yay, that is a real accomplishment. That is one of the essentials of being an author. And there sit the birds, just singing there song to make the world a beautiful, happier place. OH! You have my name in your bio for ppls to read my works! goodies, and she is right, I will review you for every review I get (or more, I find it only fair if you take the time to read my ramblings of a 15 year old!) Oh and Moonwings, I dleted al ot of the stuff that wasn't going anywhere, so I need to update, which I might do tomorrow. So yepo! TTFN. Kat

Shelly your poems are really good! Once again that was another very inspirational poem!!! You should write a book of ppoems when you grow up. ^_^