|Reviews for Penchant|
| Amaris 2/22/03 . chapter 1
I liked how you used parentheses in this poem. It makes it a lot more interesting. I also liked the fifth stanza: how "we all commit the same crimes, the same mistakes; the difference lies in the ones that are forgiven." That's all do commit crimes, and although naturally different crimes have differnt magnitudes, it is the people involved that ultimately give these crimes their value. And a crime forgiven, is (at least to the victim, the culprit may have feelings of guilt) not as bad as a crime that is forever remembered, forever effecting the relationship between those involved.
| FalseExecutioner 1/20/03 . chapter 1
Well i have to say it is gonna be tough following all of the previous reviews especially the 4th but it is great and I think the bitterness brings out the joy of the poem great job keep up the good work (well i shouldnt really say that since me myself has not written 1 story period)
| Reindeer 1/5/03 . chapter 1
Ah, this poem was very good...your pain and sorrow comes through so well.
| the Queen of Jupiter 1/4/03 . chapter 1
Very bitter; reads a lot like a diary entry than anything else, it seems. I love the first and last stanzas, as well as the line "the difference lies/in the ones that are forgiven".
Excellent, very emotion-wracked. In a good way, that is.
Keep writing. Peace
| in other words 1/3/03 . chapter 1
Great formatting. That's what stood out the most for me. The contradictory bracket thingies are cool.. nicely done. I like how the sentences can flow to either the bracketed lines, or the lines following and still make sence regardless.. that must have been tough to word. Eeexcellent job on this one.
Thanks for the reviews I've been getting from you lately, it's great to get a little boost from a good writer. :)
| peachykeen 12/31/02 . chapter 1
so, I just finished writing this long, semi-insightful review, and then I try to submit it, and it won't and it's gone forever, and I have to start all over, so I hope this will be better than the first
define: penchant and masochism
1st stanza: this is very deep - I feel like decadence represents looking nice, and it's saying that people who look nice aren't neccessarily confident - that's not the best interpretation, but it's better than what I had
2nd stanza: I really like this stanza - there's a lot going on in it, and it all works very nicely together - the last part is so true - people need to stop burning bridges, and start building new ones - "the atomsphere is sticky" I like the imagry here
3rd stanza: this is very interesting to me - there is definitely a thin line between support and flattery - I really like this form (as in the 1st stanza too), it flows very nicely and it adds to the depth
4th stanza: this part makes me really sad - it's so true - people are so hypocritical, including myself, and this brings it to the front - it brings forward many of my own faults, and I feel that everyone can relate to it
5th stanza: this totally changes the tone - it goes from very serious to "oh well, what can be done about it" - it makes the poem end on a softer note; I don't know that's such a good thing, but it works well here
overall: I really like the form - is it something you came up with, or is it an actual format? I won't be shoving any forks in your mouth, but maybe that's just me. Nice use of themes here - everything is very well connected. Tres bien!
| Obake-chan 12/31/02 . chapter 1
I don't like Windows...it's way too convinient.
Me likes the parenthesis, and the first stanza. With rhymes and stuff that makes sense for even me... Wahaha. This shares similar philosophy with me. Lots of your poems do. Is that looney or good? Hmmm.. I'm looney as looney can be.