This is extraordinary... You filled it with such emotion, it is such a horrible act and you really succeeded in getting that across. I like how you added little tidbits in the parentheses; very nice!

This one touched me so much... the relations pain me so.

But I love it still.

Fucking ... *cries*

I notice that you really like the word "saline". You always make great use of it though. I love when you say "(there is a wedge named guilt inside her throat)" because that is a feeling that happens so often and is relatable as well. The dark descriptions of this woman's rape fit the poem so well.

Great job, very nice piece, has a smooth contemporary feel to it...

sad. very poignant.

*shivers*

Ooohh, that was good.

Creepy indeed.

Raw and strong. Descriptions are excellent and perfect for the subject matter. The bracketed parts are important, they add the cold reality, so it's not just fear and terror, but an actual situation that you can compare with other situations and see its horror.

Great lines- sadly true.

Last line stops your heart for that one second, before the enormity of it hits you, and you realise again all the pain and torture.

Very powerful poem.

Another spiffy poem that just takes you off guard and makes you want to keep reading. Good job.

GeN!

Norah, that was perfect. It really brought tears to my eyes. And it made me think. It's depressing, yet the poem shows the reality of what can happen. I envy your work. *sighs*