Seriously, I'd have to agree with Randi aka Mistress Kassandra on her opinions, I read it last night, and those lines are still in my head as of now, I had to read it again and review this time, great job.

"It's the ninety-nine cent Wal-Mart version
Where shattered dreams are all we know
It's the time we've spent waiting for new chances
The time we've wasted all alone"

That verse is the best. I love the whole thing! Seriously, when are you getting a record deal?

Pretty cool, interesting way to write it. Good job

-Jessie