A very rare and beautiful poem. Very bitter. It really says alot about what you've gone through. I can sadly relate. I especially love the strong descriptive word choice.

Outer self: did that person stab you?
Inner self: no, you idiot! he just betrayed her! (you are a she and the person youre talking about is a guy, right?)

Short, but this was intense. You presented some good images to get your point across.


~Heart of the Sword

Eh. That sends a chill up my soul. It's deep and powerfully vivid and sickening.
It's rated G?

creepy...

...Wowie.

*Hug*

I like this one, very powerful and descriptive in how painful it is to lose any trust you placed in a close friend.
Something terrible must've happened to bring it to this point.

o powerful really angry good poem really good
axy

I love your poems, they're so great, deep, and awsome

Oooh the imagery there is powerful

great poem! really nice. ^^

wow...
thats goooood... to put it mildly
i know what that feels like....

Deep

Excellent imagery, very chilling. I can relate to this a lot, so it just makes the poem all the more vivid.

Keep writing! Peace ~~>

another painful one, but i really love this one though, short, but says a lot, and expresses your anguish beautifully