This is excellent! I really like this regardless of how short it is. Your detail is wonderful and creates great imagery. I'll be looking for more of your stuff!

CUTE! Defintely one of the most innocents fluffs I've read thus far! Very nice picture and realistic setting...very good

i dont have any suggestions on descripiton style, but i couldn't really picture hte girl.

the style is gorgeous, the symplicity, beautiful. i love your detailed writing, and yes, you most definitely do this again.

i will wait until you do, and until you do many more times.

...frame