I still love it, Shinola ^^ Faon is cool. And you let me steal him for a creative writing project. Keep working! And tell me when you update!

This is AMAZING. Really, really amazing. You have a ton of talent. Your words come across smoothly and clearly, and you make the sickest of moments beautiful.

I really hope you continue this. It's a brilliant opening to what could be a brilliant mystery, or thriller.

There are a few phrases that clunk a little, and the rating's too low, but other than that this is definetly one of the best pieces of writing currently on http://www.fanfiction.net

Congratulations! I can't wait to see more!