It does sound more like a song then a poem.
But I still liked it! It was really good, it makes me wish I couls write like that. Keep up the good work!

This was good. I really enjoyed it, it seemed kinda sad too. Awesome!

wow... been awhile since i reviewed.. well i remember reading this in class... so technically i was the 1st to read it ( :D ) but nyways.. it's still as bitter sweet as the first reading... nd about ur band idea... come on! u nd me ... join forces.. u'r a good singer.. nd i'm a...decent 1... so let's go!!
~stregaluna

Well, all I can say is tat it is really hard to say anything about this. It's really nice, net your usual dark mood, but there's still some of that left in here. I like it, it's different somehow.

This was really sweet, I liked it. The way the words seem to flow is what I like about it. Keep writing.

Okay, so I had a long huge ranting review going, then I highlighted something and tried to replace it with the word 'dreams' . . . guess what happened next? That's right, the dictionary function popped up in the window I was typing the review in! Curses! So . . . lol, here's the review again, for the third time! And no, I don't mind :)

Why don't I mind? 'Cuz it gives me an excuse to read your lullaby again, and as I've said a billion times, it's sooo comforting. Okay, so lullabies are -supposed- to be like that, but most lose meaning once you're older because they're meant for babies. You don't see anything out there lullaby-wise that's tailored to older people . . . at least, not until now :) I think it's a great idea. I like the imagery you use too, like 'fly away to your dreams', and those soft white wings . . . wish I had a pair of those. 'The world is gone now' . . . yes, go away world, you're stressing me out!

The words flow well too, and like you said it sounds more songy. I actually like it better that way, when I read most poetry it sounds monotonous for some reason *shrugs*. When I read this it was more like someone actually talking/humming/singing to me instead of just reciting poetry, so ya, I liked that.

Ooo, you wrote music for this? Wish I could hear it, I know you said it you didn't think it really fit, but who knows. I think if you can get emotion out of people through writing, you could prolly do the same through music as well.

Anyways, a big yay for grown-up lullabies, there are people out there who need it . . .