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| a beginner 2008-08-12 ch 27,  | abusei luved the ride ... |
| Amaryllis Faye 2008-07-02 ch 27, | abuseI. Love. It. nuff said. |
| Dragen Eyez 2008-06-16 ch 27, | abusehmm..this was a fun lil' story to read. I'm interested to see where the next bit is going. Good luck on finishing shcool; I konw how rough it can be >. |
| Obsessive Pyromaniac 2008-05-30 ch 16, | abuseDamn. Yaoi kind of turns me off. Very good story though! |
| x3life 2008-01-15 ch 26, | abuseaww this is so cute!! =) haha. im really intrested in seeing what happends nextt!! off to read the 2ndd one.. haha. |
| midnightexotic 2008-01-02 ch 26, | abuseNICE... read your story through someone else, but it was great all the same. |
| For What Its Worth 2007-08-26 ch 27, | abuseYAY! It was not as drawn out as such stories usually are! That is good. I don't think anything needs changing. *Running over to the sequel* |
| DigiChar 2007-07-05 ch 5, | abuseArg, I have that same problem with my glasses. I keep forgetting them everywhere or wondering why everything is blurry because I forgot I need them. |
| .encoded. 2007-05-30 ch 25, | abuseJust pointing out a typo... "YourGRILFRIEND!Hold on Neo!... Quite an amusing typo I have to admit. Great story though. |
| moneymakestheworldgoround 2007-05-27 ch 25, | abuseO.O YAY! XD |
| moneymakestheworldgoround 2007-05-27 ch 24, | abuseaw this is so damn cute! XD its so sad there r no good guys like that in reality ... *sob |
| moneymakestheworldgoround 2007-05-26 ch 9, | abuseaw! how mean. >_< cute chapter. |
| moneymakestheworldgoround 2007-05-26 ch 2, | abuseO.O cute. ^_^ so cliche, but i LOVE it. nice |
| AJS 2007-02-05 ch 26, | abuseThis story is very nicely written, and of course, I never have any objections to mush :D However, I can't help but to find it a little odd that not much at all was ever actually explained by the end of this. I know that you have a part 2 but with the only secret revealed being that Neo finally found out Andrea was a girl, it just feels a bit incomplete. There's still the whole supernatural thing that kind of seemed forgotten at the end and there's so many secrets about Andrea that Neo still doesn't know. I guess that was for the most part explained that he would learn about those through time, which is pretty understandable, but I think that a few more than just Neo & Andrea finally getting together should have occurred before stage one ended. However, as I said before, this is nicely written :) I think it's just because I was totally into the supernatural part of the story that when it died out, I was a little disappointed. Plus, I don't want to go on to read stage two yet because it only has 12 chapters :x But yeah. I like how you incorporate a whole bunch of different plots and such into this one story. Nicely done. I actually haven't been much into fiction lately and reading this story got me back in the tick of things so I have to thank you for that :) I really did enjoy this story! Keep up the good work. I hope that you'll someday return to finish up stage two and clear all the things left unstated in this stage. -- Alyssa |
| Enaid 2007-01-31 ch 27, | abuseamazing!! heehee Adrian and Kaede sitting in a tree... so great! glad they finally r getting together. so glad i dont have to wait for the sequel to this... well off i go! |