Hm. Pretty. But what are you going to do with it? There's the question. No room to put it in that head of yours unless you tidy up a bit.

Damn. That's...damn...

You're good at this poetry stuff, aren't you?

I told you on your journal that I liked the poem, I think, but when I saw it up here I had to tell you again. 'Tis very sad, but very beautiful in its sadness. *hug* Be happy, A.H.!

This was so awesome. I loved it!

Very cool. I love it. When you use 1 word in a line really gives it a GREAT touch. Wonderful visual. You've done an awsome job of setting the physical sceane, and of what you're thinking and suffering inside. This is gonna go on my favorites...

awesome. great use of metaphors. spacing too. i like how you didn't use caps or punctuation. sets up a good mood. if you change the formation of it slightly, it could be a great song.