Wow, that's amazing, your a great writer. Many people try to sugar coat life and make it out to be somthing it isn't... This really paints a truly realistic picture of what life can be like... Feeling like your unloved and un-cared for. At the same time it sends the message that in the very end all is right with the world and for all the problems there is some good to come of it all. Great Poem!

wow. thats amazing. i could never write sem-optimistic but urs is amazing!

I can;t believe you wrote these. These is great stuff.

I like it!! It is optimistic in a kinda twisted weird way but that makes it cool!

It was not Entirely optimistic but the ending can be considered so..
But wow.. The description and everythin holds the poem in place.. It holds a nice ring to it.. Random rhyming is good.. But anyway, I am drawn to the girl in the poem.. Im not sure what I can say to help you improve this because I think it is already very well done..

wow. This is great. It's straight and to the point. This is a really hopeful piece. Wow. There's more to say, but I can't put my finger on it just now.

wow... i've had some poems hit pretty close to home... but i dont think any have ever come this close.. i really love this one... i mean. there's very few works of urs i dont like...(cuz ur so good nd all...).. but this 1... wow..this is def. goin in my poem book
~stregaluna

this was good. lines put together well.

didnt really like the ending tho, and maybe that's just cus im not the optomistic kind of person.

choppy at times.

but i liked HOW you wrote it, so its all good.

i really liked the lines,
"She swears they'll be sorry

She swears they will pay

The swears keep her going

For just one more day"
because that sort of thing drives me too.

good work.

-the untitled suicidal

p.s. i found you through a review and id like to say ive g ot a lot of respect for how you truthfully review rather than gush or ** or a combination of both.

Freakin' Awesome. The best one I've read in a really REALLY long time. This poem just made my day.

This was really nice, and I liked it. Optimistic? I don't know about that, maybe. Thank you for the review on my fic, I know it was messed up and she was OOC, but it wasn't meant in be 'in-character.' Yeah, the past/present tenses were intentional. Keep writing, this was excellent, way better than I'd ever be.

Although I'm not of a religious sort, I do find this poem very to be very nice indeed. As you said, it's one of your first optimistic poems, but it still has that tipically yours dark feel to it. Keep on going the way you do now, and you'll be a great poet with your own style. Keep on writing!

Ah! I really liked that one. At first it sounded just like another one of those "loved and lost" ones, but I loved the way you turned it around. Nice poem-it actually rhymes, unlike most of the stuff I manage to churn out. Good job.

Good job!!!!!!

Woo hoo, I love poems that actually tell a story! And it's even got a moral too! I especially liked the end rhymes at the end, it was a nice way to finish it. Ooo, and these lines were really cool:

"She's lying alone in a bed for two"

and

"She swears they'll be sorry
She swears they will pay
The swears keep her going
For just one more day"

And it was pretty moving how she forgived them every single time, and sad when she died (was it suicide? I'm getting that impression, although it could've just been from a broken heart-kinda thing, that would make more sense cuz at the end it said she never lost hope so I guess she prolly wouldn't have killed herself, plus it's a lot sadder if she died just cuz no one loved her) and then I felt like cheering when she went up to heaven! That's 'nother cool thing about this, it covers so many emotions (saddness at the beginning, turning into anger, then to forgiveness, depression, death [ok, so death isn't really an emotion, sue me :P], then happiness).

Just some typos (I think) I saw:

"Yet they continues to prove her wrong for hoping" was prolly meant to be "Yet they continue to prove her wrong for hoping", I think it sounds better tho as "Yet they continue to prove she was wrong to hope"*

and the next line

"Not once did she ever lose faith of hope" was maybe supposed to be "Not once did she ever lose faith or hope". Not quite sure if that was an error or intentional tho.

*If you do change it to that, change the next line to "But not once did she ever lose hope or faith" just so it doesn't sound repetitive.

Anyways, enough nitpicking, great poem (n nice title, you sorta come in expecting a sad ending 'cuz of it and are pleasantly surprised). Later!