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| Rara Punk 2004-04-19 ch 1,   | Awesome prologue! It's in my faves so I can finish it later. Sorry - I have no constructive comments - it's damm good :D |
| Stormer 2003-02-21 ch 1, | Hey there Chris!! I’m here at last to read your story! Or to start anyway *g* Firstly I thought I’d mention that I calculated that you have an average of 2305.63 words per chapter so far :P Anyway, as for this chapter, it was a good introduction and intriguing, but of course there are a few technical improvements that could be made – would you rather I sent them on email? They’d be pretty damn long if I put them in reviews *S* Anyway, good start and I will be reading more very soon! |
| Xelena 2003-01-29 ch 6, | i wonder why Darryl thought they were after him- i mean, they were- but i wonder why he thought so.... nice style |
| Xelena 2003-01-26 ch 5, | so Darryl and Roseanda are the same age, correct? also, was Darryl's father a mage or a demon? just curious... anyways, please continue as soon as possible. |
| Queen Nabooru 2003-01-13 ch 1, | First off: cool title! That's what caught my attention right away. So many people seem to have trouble coming up with good titles, but this one's interesting. Secondly, I love your description and detail! It's hard, in my experience, to find good original fantasy works that aren't solely made up of either lengthy descriptions of the main character or one-line paragraphs that barely manage to move the story along. However, you obviously have a good grasp of mechanics and know how to write a good story. I'm interested, and looking forward to more. |