Well, it is a unique view on the topic. I like it, though.

From a cynic like myself, I would say that your poem contains certain truths. Very good view from the other side of the eye. Though most people tend to harp on the moral issues and proclaim themselves good and proper, the reverse is usually true.

Last sentence for the third stanza is a bit long and instead of 4 sentences, it sounded like 5. If you want a suggestion, send me an email!

Wow... this is... wow... so amazing... very good poem

Hey, cool poem. I like it, and you always rhyme. Which is mostly good but at some parts it seems sort of out of place. Anyway, wanted to tell you that "Roads" wasn't about Riley. I told you, I have passed that stone in the river.

hmm.. very interesting.. it's very odd. most people don't seem to write about this idea.. honestly when i first went to read it i thought it was more about how being pure sometimes can really f** up everything u truly want.. like me... i can be such a goodie-goodie-2-shoes.. it suxs! cuz of that "purity" i have no fun... but how u worked with this subject... it's very good i like it... I'm about to check out ur other work that i saw up! good job can't wait to read the next thing!

stregaluna

Interesting... And excellent!