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| avani.neglect 2003-04-25 ch 1,  | abuseNice to see someone who has a good storyline and can actually write well...I've been running into a lot of...otherwise. Ya. Good start, watch your dialogue. At points you make them say things that people don't say in real life. But otherwise, fabulous...can't wait for more. |
| ssjbookgirl 2003-03-24 ch 1, | abusethat was good but a little boring. i hope that the next chapter will have more action. |
| Karasu Tendo 2003-01-19 ch 1, | abuseHm... well, the beginning sets everything up nicely, and makes an interesting parallel... but I think I need to see more before I can tell you if it's good or not. *laughs* Just kidding! It's a great beginning. But I would like to see more soon. ^_~ |
| Angelic Hooligan 2003-01-18 ch 1, | abuseThis is the second time I'm reviewing this because ff.net is a bastard! So far, so good. I like it. The way they talk is kinda weird, but I'll get used to it. Keep going! |