Love the story!

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Ali

This story was remarkbly good. And is Very similiar to another story with a Maze a Dark Prince and a boyfriend and 1 admirer and going home. But besides that everything was different :D Good Job.I t might have just been a coincidence but i dont know

I really liked this story. I'm kinda into the whole Romance/Horror type of story. Though I can't help but notice that you keep mispelling 'private', you spell it 'privet'. I don't mean to sound superior and all that, but privet actually means - 'common hedge bush'. But either way, I completely enjoyed reading your work. Next stop: the sequel!

kate

wow

wow..that was a great story...you know how to draw a gal in lol...one thing though...privet is spell private...sorry thats just a constant mistake i kept seeing throughtout the story...yea well anyways on to the sequel I go...

Great story. well developed characters and plot. I just wish that Jerome has gotten his promise fulfilled...
maybe next round?

great start

I just discovered this, and early in the story I was absolutely terrified that this would hold too many similarities with the movie you mention, Labyrinth. I was so happy to find that that wasn't so. I really can't wait to read the sequel.

I really like this so far, but I can't help but notice that a LOT of the scenes are paralleled with L.J. Smith's Forbidden Game series. Seriously. The entire hair-lip-scene was practically the same, followed exactly by the "You can't, can you?" scene. Sorry to say, but it sounds a bit TOO much like FG so far...kind of...copied. Maybe not, but that's what I'm seeing so far. I know you haven't updated in a while though. I'm gonna read on anyway. ^^

i loves it so much

oh my god i love it

i don't know why but from the very beggining i really hate Will... and i was mad at Ashly for being martyr, i want to beat the hell out of her...

at least their not together anymore.. mwahahaha.. ilove Jerome^^

Great story. Although there were varioius grammar errors. Still nice.

- DruidShadow

I love how Tajeiri and Jerome talk to each other in this chapter. Very nicely written.

The rest of the story? There's only two problems that I can think of. The first one is not much of a problem. It's how you overuse words like "frown", but maybe it's supposed to be that way, so I won't say anything against it. The other problem is how Will is... more like a robot than a real person. It would be better if you gave him more emotions.

Other than those two problems, I think it's a good story.

awesome!